I lay in my disheveled bed
Fully aware the curve of my neck
Aches for the arousing feel
Of your painfully soft breath
Recalling how it caused pleasant goosebumps
And ticklish shivers down my spine.
I lie knowing my lonely and exposed back
Longs for the protection and comfort
Of your warm body pressed against it.
Rebellious strands of hair fall onto my cheek
Hoping you will gently slide them back where they belong.
Restless fingers flex and wander aimlessly
Wishing to find home within
Your open palm, your dark hair, your familiar face.
My mind returns to its favorite memories, craving more
Yet realizing that there will be no more.
Lips part, wanting the tingling desire
And the wet heat of your tongue.
Mouth remains silent yearning to whisper your name
Or release a pure, effortless laugh
Not inhibited by the haunting past.
Eyes retrace this room for millionth time
Still seeking the image of you
Though the photographs were removed from the walls long ago.
My head needs the pillow of your strong chest
Rocking it to sleep with the rhythm of your breathing.
My heart searches to feel fulfilled again,
To be connected to yours.
It appears they all have forgotten
How my eyes widened in fear when you
Gripped my unexpecting wrists in your barely-controlled rage
That your features could contort into intense anger
How your bitter words would crash into my ears
And my stomach turned and churned to no end
With the tension from our arguments
Or how my grudges against you would cause
Bruises that could not be seen externally.
I lie here remembering all the terrible and wonderful times
Our victories and our tribulations
And how this battle had ended.
I lie on this seemingly empty bed
Awake hours after the night has conquered the day
Thinking of how when slumber does overtake me
You will continue to reside as an unstoppable phantom
In the corner of my dreams.
I lay feeling the heavy weight of Love in my chest
Hating the fact that I still miss you.
Author notes
form: freeverse
color: teal or dark blue
theme: longing
inspired by evanescence- my immortal
A contest entry
- *POD* = The Poem of the Day by Arkbear.
300 points, ended July 7, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ferris Wheels and Train Stations by Andii.
525 points, ended July 23, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable winner
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600 points, ended July 15, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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600 points, ended July 31, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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1250 points, ended August 12, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable winner
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425 points, ended October 1, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable winner
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a poem most or all of us can relate to in one way or another and at least once probably more in our lives. Its quite clear why its such a winning poem.
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wow this has gotten a lot of trophies and i can see why. i liked this one. so much emotion in it! great poem. i wish you good luck in my twin's contest!
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Wow so much emotion in this and well deserving of the previous trophies it has recieved. So deep with feelings and I could almost imaginge the situation. Very good, thanks for entering my contest.
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know exactly how you feel in this piece. It's amazing how easily our hearts can break isn't it
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DO YOU KNOW THAT THIS CONTEST DOESNT EXCEPT ENTIRES FROM ANYONE WHO ALREADY WON A TROPHY... ITS IN THE RULES
BUT THIS WAS SO VERY BEAUTIFUL THAT I CAN SEE WHERE IT WON SO MANY TROPHYS ALREADY...........BEAUTIFUL WRITE.................... -
I like it well doen
all the best
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this is ok written beauty nice
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wow beautifully written! I really enjoyed reading this piece! Such a good flow and full of so much emotion! great job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Good job, good luck and thanxx for entering.
Luv,
Candy
Contest Holder
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its a good write, but long much?? thats the only problem.. so besides that, wow.. it really does reflect on my immortal (love the friggin song) and it is beautiful over all.. this is deep and thought provoken and how you were able to write about a some one getting hurt like that is amazing.. even though it was long, i was hooked all the way through which is a big compliment because i have a really short attention span unless its something worth paying attention to, and this was definatly worth it.. thank you for entering in my contest and best of luck with all the other contests i have seen that you entered.. great write.
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This was absolutely amazing. I have nothing else to say other than that.
Just wow.
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Wow, amazing poem. SO much feeling and i love the imagery. I really enjoyed reading it
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awesome poem in itself, full of such love and loss, and mixed emotions. truly a beautiful poem to read.
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Oh what a write! Emotions...longing. I am moved! Thanks for the entry!!!
Love~
Az
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This is very intense, the beginning is so wonderful and beautiful, like the passion of a relationship that you might envy.
The turn of events I'm afraid is all too common. It's amazing how strong the love remains and how intense the missing and longing can be. You've done a wonderful job expressing this story, very detailed and vivid in all aspects.
Best of luck!
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Wow, I love this poem.
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this is really well written, i loved reading it. thanks for sharing this, and thanks for entering, also thanks for actually following the rules. :]
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wow....beyond well written
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3 Soft Tears
Accompanied with the song that you chose, I couldn't believe how hard my heart strings tugged. My average of sleep has is from 4-5 hours, because I lie in bed, and it as if this poem is a story of each and every night. This is a wonderful write, it matches my criteria perfectly. Thank you for entering and good luck!!
With Love & Thanks,
*MJ*
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Wow
I love this poem Its a great write and It's really kinda emotional, I love it. Good lcuk~
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wow sweetie i l-o-v-e dis poem..
it is so good it brings a lot of things to mind
great wright and ..xoxox
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Intense ~
I admire a Poet who can write such length, yet
still keep me interested after the first long stanza ~
Very nicely done ~
The Theme is a bit common ~
Presentation very nice ~
Granmmatical choices well chosen ~
Flow was right on ~
Over all....not bad ~
The best to you in this contest ~
Bear ~
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