The sunlight had called
called me by name
as I sat in my house
Now I lay in a field far away
listening to the words of the call
My breath catches as senses come alive
Golden sunshine spreads over my body,
hugging skin and relaxing taunt muscles,
creating patterns in oranges and yellows
in my vision
beneath the closed lids of my eyes
A tickle,
like the brush of lashes on the cheek
on my bare knee
{a butterfly?}
the grass,
plush but supportive,
soft but coarse
cushions my head
molds to my back
a bed,
more comfortable by far
than the one left behind
I turn my head
Take a breath,
slow and deep.
My nose tingles,
filled with the scent of life
Green and vibrant,
strong and impossibly pure.
It fills me to my limit with
joy
sorrow
life
These are the words
the words of the call
Author notes
Continuation of "calling me by name" needs editing, I think
In a list
Again, honest commentary please
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"these are the words
the words of the call"
!!! I am in love with your poetry right now, it seems like every one I click on is filled with so much material and meaningful substance that I can't get enough. you have such a delicate way with words. this is truly beautiful
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I tell you it's brilliant! I'm not one who's a fan of sunlight really, I prefer the rainy cloudy days but the way you've depicted the joy and warmth that the sun can bestow, the life of summer days well I think I might just have to change my views on the whole sunny versus rainny. I do like the previous Call me by name poem though, but this one is written with just as much skill. Well done I absolutely loved reading it.
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thank you for taking the time to do so, I really appreciate it.
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I love the poem. I love the imagery. The imagery took me to where you where. I is tough to pick out a single favorite part. All of it is great.
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if its tough to pick a favorite part, i think i've done my job!
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I liked it, a lot!! amazing imagery, made me feel as if i were there
"It fills me to my limit with
joy
sorrow
life"
amazing write
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I'm glad I could take on the journey with me!
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Awesome writing, my friend!
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thankee-sai, I appreciate it!
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I wouldn't edit a thing in this Cai. MARVELOUS imagery in this piece. It was almost as if I was laying beside you in the grass of that field.
I think this was wonderful
Love to see new work from you Cai...keep it up Sweetie
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oh wow, thanks, that makes me feel a little less nervous about picking up the pencil again...
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