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tales we tell our children.

 

 

A lullaby that we sing to our children at night,

the tale of the sandman that brings peaceful sleep.

No one knows the true tale of the sandman,

A story of everlasting pain and perdition.

Foul abomination of the night,

gouging the eyes out of sleeping babes heads

taking them back to his iron nest on the eclipse side of the moon

to feed them to his own children.

Leaving the babes sightless,

rose trailing tears down their cheeks.

Sinister creatures beyond atonement.

The sandman bringing sleep to innocents?

Sending them into your head

like a venomous bullet straight to the brain.

Conjuring hallucinations and nightmares,

We are naught but puppets dancing on macabre strings. 

So, be ever mindful of the tales we tell our children.  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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word bank is: perdition, rose, puppet, sandman, bullet, atonement, conjur, gouge, lullaby, eclipse.

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  • Great Puppett V
    July 30, 2007

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    well done

    for originally a word bank you did excellent with the flow. The imagery jumps off of the page and the whole has a wonderful well thought out theme. thanks and good luck


  • Minstrel Knight
    July 18, 2007

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    This is a great story here, I like what you did with the word bank. It's a very true message too. We dumb down and sweeten up lots of stories to tell our kids. I've never heard of this particular version of the sandman but it was a creepy version either way. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Jiyo
    July 10, 2007

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    dear God, I'll heed your warning and never tell my children (supposing i have some) the story of the sandman, or at least your version of it, i kept looking behind me as i was reading this, i kept getting the feeling that something was gonna bite the back of my neck and suck the brains right out of my skull, haha, so, supposing that you made me think this was going to happen to me, i would say you did an exeptional job with this...just imagine what would happen if you would have done this on Hansle and Grettle...hahah, I would be having nightmares about Donna Summers attacking me with a bowling pin covered in bloated whale guts..........


  • Faded Existence
    July 8, 2007

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    Wow, very... wow. Definitely a different perspective on things, but I really liked the creativity.

    -Faded


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    Wow...this is VERY good.
    I like the words highlighted
    that you used from the word bank -
    but its the story that chilled
    me to the bone...gave me shivers,
    my Lord.

    Lane

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