Beautiful perfect flower
Your petals so white
My hands too black
And covered in blood
Beautiful perfect doll
Your dress so clean
My hands too black
And covered in blood
But just watching you is worth it
Just to see you smile
And loving you far away
Is almost the same as loving you up close
Just listening to you is worth it
Just to hear you say my name
And loving you far away
Is almost the same as loving you up close
Beautiful perfect angel
Your wings so celestial
My hands too black
And covered in blood
Even though I can't touch you
I also can't stop loving you
Author notes
Yeah, this is a poem I wrote for a contest, but it failed.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well it may have failed but this poem has a little flair about it. You have nice form and rhythmn here.
Poem gets a little emotional in places but that can be worked out. It is a little dark maybe soften it a bit. Even dark work has to be refined.
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Well, I thought it was great and I really enjoyed reading it. It was amazing and flowed nicely. Good work on this and keep writing.
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