The faint glow of hopelessness
The scent of loss fills the room
Anger and tears mix in a violent clash
A gentle breeze,
Lifting the stench of sorrow
Regretful anguish stains my face
A bubble in my throat
Choking off my last words
I turn away from her dying body
Shock sweeps by
Crushing me beneath it
I whisper words of remorse
Author notes
well behaved women rarely make history"
A contest entry
- Sad and Hope by silencethequestion.
300 points, ended July 28, 2007, 39 entries
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wow. great write. thanks for entering
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Hoodwinked
Sad and depressing write you have here sis but as always I think it is very well written. You have such great emotion and pain expressed in this write. Great job keep it up.
Never give up
Kate
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This is a good poem I like it. Up untill I turn away from her dying body it reminds me of a time (no details though).
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Hood-Wink!
This write is so full of raw emotion and pain. It is hard to say goodbye to one who has died. I don't think that we ever really get over the pain of missing them. Excellent write
You have just been Hood-Winked by a Poetic Bandit
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Hoodwink ~
aaaaaaah, how sad ~ yet I liked the final line. ~ Very nice job~ good luck to you in the contest~
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word: wow... tell me how else to describe it.
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