Acid rain comes
pouring all over me
taking everything away
leaving me naked
exposed
weak
in need . . .
The air stopped
whispering to me
the day you left
with my soul
my heart
my life
our home . . .
Can't breath
can't feel
can't think
won't write
won't speak
Is this the end . . .
or just the beginning?
Author notes
Well, this is not meant to have any coherence . . it's just me, passing through some rough times . . . words pouring out of me . .
Please tell me what you think
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Hopefully it's the beginning of a new life, for you. Maybe you're gonna have to pick up your pieces, but it will be worth it.
Very sad poem, indeed...
But there's always hope that something better will come along.
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This one is very sad. I've been there not too long ago. I think... it all depends on how strong you are, pertaining to whether it's the end, or beginning. It seems the emotions went very deep here... mine were shallow, though they do still linger about. So you might say that, for me... this was a transitional period. I could have went either way, but chose the beginning since I long for something really special, and know that such a thing does exist. Anyway... I hope this was the beginning for you. Wonderfully written!
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wow...I real like the power and emotions here. You ask some great questions too. I like how you ended this one. I feel you are at a point in your life of confusion and uncertainty. This poem made me want to hug you. I like the 2nd stanza, when you said the air stopped whispering to me. That was so powerful.
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OHHHH Thanks, im glad you liked it !! All your comments are always very important to me. You are too sweet ! I was going through some rough times but thanks to God, my family and friends everything is ok now !!! Luv ya!
K
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it's the beginning of the end and starting of something new and better, ... I hope.
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this is a great poem, i love the emotion that you put into it, it's a great piece...
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Thank you so much for your comment !!!
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