Lying before me is a perplexed masterpiece
Caught between an Elmo blanket, plastic diapers
and war headlines on CNN
She lies vulnerable and unwavering
Like a canvas waiting for the watercolors of an artist
or a blank page waiting for a descriptive poet
The vastness of her potential is merely too large
For me to fully comprehend
so I sit in artist's awe and poetic silence
With my shaky hands and unpolished words
A contest entry
- Mike's Slowie by Silent Cougar.
525 points, ended July 10, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the thought this conveys, which is that the title also mentions, the possibilities when we see babies, (and children too)! And yes, I do hope I offer constructive criticism when necessary...ask my kids, they'll tell you!
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Long before we even think of having children our offspring to be chose us by hand. Your poetically expressed awe reflects facets of the mystical processes of interaction between souls across different planes of existence. The image you paint of the instant of your admiration also paints the (the difference in) atmosphere that exists between various realms. The talents you saw contained within her was a true vision of who the souls of man truly are. I hope and pray you will do anything you can throughout her life to preserve and stimulate the beauty and power in her soul. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
Chris
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Yep, I guess that is what you certainly did do, isn't it- so then you wrote it!
A lovely honest piece of work, this, if it is actually real... is it real? did this poem really happen?
Because if this poem isn't real, and if it didn't really happen? then I am sorry, it is just rubbish instead I'm afraid.
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Well, it did happen!
It took me 10 years to write this! Thanks for you nice comments!
Monique
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A beautiful interpretation of the prompt 'A Blank Page'.
To liken your childs life to a blank page is refreshing in itself and to know that you can effect that life, much as a writer can a blank page must be gratifying.
All the best in the contest
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Thanks for your kind words!
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A small child is full of so many possibilities. Guiding her to reach her full potential is the daunting task of a parent. Very nicely written, Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Thank You!
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Well, firstly, I think your words are very polished. You have taken the prompt and looked further afield for inspiration, that I like. A great piece my friend, and a worthy entry, well done.
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Thanks for your kind words!
It's kinda hard writing about something that is so close to your heart, huh? You KNOW what you want to say...but how to say it?
Thanks for hosting this contest!
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