I watched her as she slept
This women, better then I
Then wonder when malicious
I seek to make her cry
I mourn these hours frequently
But never tell her so
Knowing that I love her
Yet such pain I do bestow
Selfish in indulgence
I cast her needs aside
Save for raucous moments
When joy is but the ride
If now I could be honest
And take her gentle hand
She'd find this men contrite
Sinking in the sand
She's older now and not as shapely
As those young and specious gals
But her beauty goes much deeper
Her eyes are almond pearls
And if ever I should lose her
In life I shall recede
To the depths of hell
Oh words, bring on reprieve
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Talk to yourself by Janice M Pickett.
800 points, ended November 15, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hi Bob this is a beautiful poem but I don't see how you are having a converstaion with yourself?? Am I missing the point here? Please correct me if I am wrong. This is beautiful however.
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Another look at your heart. Simply wonderful. Very gently written yet a touch of something else that I can't quite put into words. Thank you for sharing this.
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Bob
This is so beautiful
It speaks of love it speaks of hope and above all it speaks how you feel.
Thanks for sharing you the inner you
Much love Julie xxx -
Beautiful!!!!!! *sighs* I love the emotion you put in this poem. So open. So honest! "When joy is but the ride"! ahhhhhh! you have penned another wonderful poem hun! I wouldn't change, edit, take out, or put anything in. It's perfect the way it is.
love always,
broken -
One of the seven deadly sins
of marraige/relationship..
'taking the one we love for granted--
it's so easy to do and so hard to undo.
This is sad and beautiful I love the stanza:
"She's older now and not as shapely
As those young and specious gal
But her beauty goes much deeper
Her eyes are almond pearls"
The heart and soul of beauty
and being in love!!
Outstanding !
~Pastel
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A do over
In life we sometimes wish for that do over & ao many of us just take for granted that wonderful partner. Fools at times. But I thank you again Pastel & wish you love my great poet friend
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I can relate
This is a very good poem Bob - the rhyme is great the flow very good - the content I am sure thosands could relate to - thanks for this wonderful poem - it touches the heart - I like the way your poems tell a real life truth - keep up the great work - "Husbands, love your wife even as Christ loved the Church and gave His life for it" - Bless God - Joe
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thanks
I always appreciate your kind words
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I think this is a very beautiful write.
Your words are wonderful and filled with great emotion.
I really enjoyed reading this poem
Thanks
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Why would you hurt the one you love if you love them...In most cases the love is more for self than the other...you have penned a very honest piece and I like that
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Sad But well Written!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is profoundly sad!!! Why is it that we always hurt the ones we love??? The question of the century or maybe the eighth wonder or the world!!! But you pour your heart out once more in this piece!!! I liked it alot. Maybe one day we will learn how to show love and respect without hurting one another or playing mind games etc... I hope you cam reconnect with this love which has apparently captured your heart and holds it hostage!!! Another great poem from you Bob!!!~~Toni~~
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i know the feeling of hurting someone you love. this is a very beautiful and yet sad write
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Whoa this is just like the man I just wrote about in Lazy Intimidation. Just a totally differant angle. I know he loves his wife yet for some reason he always hurts her, like he cant help it. I personally do not understand this love/pain some people do because I wear my heart on my sleeve. I fall in love way to easy. LOL thats not good either LOL. Wonderful:
Flooding you with roses
Luv Ya
Delila
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To this heart you have moved in and now you can not leave...And if ever I should lose her In life I shall recede To the depths of hell Oh words bring me reprieve...this brought tears to my eyes and a warmth to my soul*hug* thank you for being all that you are for me*hug*
LOVE TO YOU:f:f:f
ANN
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