When the earth first took its breath
and jewelled stars shone out their hue.
The golden sun beamed forth its rays,
illuminating me and you.
Moisture from the rain did cling
and glistened bright upon our skin
with droplets that contained our love
and nourished us from deep within.
And when your lips first kissed mine,
it was under a crescent moon,
created to witness the joy
of gentle sway and loving swoon.
This overwhelming happiness
that all of the world can see,
means I was created for you
and you were created for me.
A contest entry
- Love by torturedsoul9876.
300 points, ended July 26, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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love spins the stars inside the eye that stare upon the lover's face; beaming back rays with beauty's smile - a good poem showing how love dances
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Kiran I never cease to wonder at the number of different way you go with your poems of love always something different on a subject that many find hard to write decent poetry about Excellent
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another amazingly graceful homage to love and its manifestation through your union with your beloved ...
I can feel the bliss that you are revealing to us through such soulful words ...
maa
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Good poem
i liked you sweet poem,it was enjoying and interesting!Great work from the poet!Keep on writing!Lisa K haslett Raytown Missouri! -
I love how you tied the greatness of creation to your personal love...fun perspective.
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Now this is just simply beautiful and so full of love..Awesome..Hazel
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This is brilliantly executed, and bright in its tone! The flow is splendid, and the theme of love in nature's sweet presence simply plays its own magic to render this piece beautiful!
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the title itself says it all and the beautiful inspiring words win my admiration to this one.
i love the flow and imagery behind this.. its magnificently written with deep view. Inshort i admire this piece of work, cos its a great one.. ..u did it amazingly, great job!!
I look forward to read more of your work and do take a look at mine too, u might like it..
Thanks, love,
Mansoor
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beautiful work....
hey kiran its such an amazing write... i cannot say exactly which stanza i liked the most... because all of them are so beautiful and so serene... I just loved your poetry... You must be a true romantic....
Keep it up...
May God Bless You...
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Kiran...this is so beautiful!
You are one of the best romantic poets on this site!
This has wonderful flow and rhyme!
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a beutiful write and each stanza out-does the other...wonderful flow...just a joy to read your work, so elegant and filled with love
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