It's been a few years now
since you passed away in that car accident
but it wasn't until a while back
that I came out of my shock to
realize that you are really gone
There is a scar that pierces my heart
that was made that day my best friend
told me that you were in an accident
the doctors didn't know if you would
survive but you survived for a few weeks
and during that time did I realize
how much I had to come to love you
I never wanted you to leave me
you were the one for me
my heart and soul knew it
but you were taken from me
why did you have to leave me in this world?
Everday I wish that you would come back
and all this would be a terrible dream
that I could wake up from
but each day is a rude awakening
I wrote you a letter and gave you
a necklace that I had put together
with a chain and ring that meant a lot to me
I wanted you to have it to hold
and cherish forever and always
That's what you did
you wore it until you passed away
and made sure to let me know
everday that you loved me and
didn't want me to be sad
But I'm lost here without you
I want you back here with me
I want to see your smile
I want to hear your laugh
I want to feel the way I once did
but up in Heaven I want you to know
that baby I love you and I miss you
Author notes
Love is unconditional
A contest entry
- no name by Aquamarine..
315 points, ended July 7, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loss by Clinging-to-Life.
450 points, ended July 26, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautifully written. I'm sorry for your loss....This is great how you were able to release some of your pain. Thank you for entering. Goodluck.
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thank you
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Buuuunnie....this is sad Bunnie and I am here if you need to talk...you need hugs, lots and lots of hugs!
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awwww, thank you so much sammie.......I just really miss him he was my everything.....now he's gone....
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good luck
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thank you
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Such sad but beautiful words from a precious heart...You have such a way with words...please pass the tissues for tears are flowing
Excellent my little one
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thank you so much, it means a lot from ur kind words
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wow, nice job! I really liked this poem, for it spoke to me in some sort of way. I have had a few losses in mt life, and I know that feeling that you just explained. I hope this didn't happen to you... did it? I know, it is a very sad thing and it is hard to control your sadness when you're really feeling it. Very well done, nice job! I hope you do well in the contest... good luck! Keep writing, nicely done!!
Love you bundles
~Pandy
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thank you so much pandy
thank you
love you muches
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love IS unconditional you are right. This poem brings out emotions for me because it makes me think about losing my guy. I'm going to Kenya for a month and leaving at home and its killing me that I won't see him, but after reading this it made me think "don't be stupid!" Because I'm coiming back home to him, whereas you have lost someone that can't come back.
With sympathy,
Lexy xx
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thank you so much
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uhm...the flow of this piece is good...the words are simple...not a heavy piece to read...cool! um...tone is sad and gloomy (i like it)...good on descibing the emotions...nice job!
good luck on the contest!
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thank you, glad you like it
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