There was a time
Back then you know
When roses held real beauty
The glow, sparkle
and shine of it all
Held true life and meaning
But that was then
This is now
Things are all hazy
Since I lost you
I have some news
Those roses aren't so beautiful
Black as tar
Dead as night
They are paying tribute to you.
Author notes
#14 - A Garden of Black Roses
A contest entry
- Phrase/Quote Contest by burdened.
600 points, ended July 22, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You managed to put this across in a good way, making sure that it was not cliche. I like the line 'Those roses aren't so beautiful', it attacked me, with sadness, but also a slight bit of anger, like a thorn. Good luck, and thanks for this entry. Xx
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well done....the rose metaphor can easily be overused, but you managed not to, I think...good luck in the contest!
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i really like the metaphor, it is used very well.
well done
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Nice poem. I really liked it. My favorite stanza was:
The glow, sparkle
and shine of it all
Held true life and meaning
I noticed some emotion in the poem. The glow and sparkle from stanza #2 died out.
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