Demons- parasites preying on humans
serving destruction, soar
Greedily feasting on souls
Slinking forward without remorse
Ill-mannered guests sicken hosts
Dwell in heart's humble abode
Practicing cold rationalization
They urge, and they goad
humans to abandon
inherent empathy
vaccinating, instead,
with lethal apathy.
Hellion's new-found friend
selfish Id, as coined by Freud
Hedonist excavates instinct
primal and devoid,
lacking ardent pathos
burying frigid conviction
in Earth's fev'rish center
True man's perdition
Hand-in-hand, murdering hosts
Converting humans to brutes
they exponentially grow
Surging at existence's roots
Clashing with the angels,
slumped in defeat.
At the base of demolished pillars
supporting value's ancient roof
Now cracked from end to end
Then, perfect, agleam and new
Polished by gentle hands
Before being shoved askew
The guardians shrink into corners
Outnumbered, defending themselves
Unable to reach the emotions
Savages threw on back shelves
Exhaustion takes it's toll
On God's last line of defense
As rogues scamper amok
Creating true offense
A rift that will split the world,
Which is reigned by impudence.
Author notes
Option I: Writing for a title
I tried to do it justice.
A contest entry
- Another Chance to Test Your Poetic Fortitude by Minstrel Knight.
700 points, ended July 18, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any comments are appreciated
Comments
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I enjoyed this and must slightly disagree with a previous comment - I did not find it choppy and rather liked your travel between concepts. Bravo !
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This is a good idea you've got here. I like what you've done with the title I gave you, sounds like about what I was going for with this title. You paint a vivid picture. On the down-side though this is a little choppy, and seems to jump around. I'd have liked to see more connection between all these images as opposed to just describing things. Good job overall though, thanks for entering and good luck.
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