Dressing Room Fantasy
shopping again
more of that mall crawl
we start to walk past
a lingerie store
joke-in-ly I mention we should go in
We smile and giggle
as we point out different things
I ask you to try on a champagne silk teddy
You giggle and your eyes sparkle
as you enter the dressing room
Slowly undressing you tease me
telling me what you are doing
how soft
silky smooth
it feels against your skin and
just how sexy the teddy
You step out
to give me a little show
you dance and giggle
teasing me so
your eyes sparkle
as you turn to get changed
I sneak in behind you
you gasp and tell me to get out
but I close the door quickly and
kiss you before I am seen
I hold you close
as our lips embrace
tongues dance
our hearts pound
passion builds
minds spin
I press you against the wall
kissing
nibbling
your
soft
tender
neck
My hands caressing
your every curve
your sides
hips
down to your bum
A moan escapes your lips and
I kiss you again
so we do not get caught
I slowly slide the teddy aside
my fingers
caress
her
moist
tender
lips
I slowly enter you
you gasp for a breath
as it
s - l - o - w - l - y
enters deeper
deeper
inside
until he is all the way inside
Holding him there
filling her tenderness
with his strength
stretching her wide open
to let the desire
and the fires consume us
As our eyes engage
each others
desire
builds
with such intensity
aching
to explode
I start to thrust
slowly
your nails
digging deep
into my back
blood trickles
I whisper your name
into your ear
my hot breath
next to your neck
makes your skin tingle
Your eyes close tightly
as I nibble
upon the tenderness
of your neck and
thrust in so hard
I explode
pumping my hot juices of love
deep inside of you
you feel it burning inside
my manhood pulsating
drawing you closer
closer
to your own final release
in an earth shattering moment
someone knocks on the door
asking if everything is alright
all you can manage to say is
Uh huh
Author notes
Passionate Knight
In a list
A contest entry
- Make me go "ooh!!"...(Adults Only)-Prewrites Welcome! by Daizy21.
450 points, ended October 13, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Yummy. I want to have that kind of experience shopping. Sounds wonderful. Well written. This was very good, very hot.
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What an adventure in that shopping mall...Sex in a heated rush with out care in an earth shattering moment...I was holding my breath
This is very good! Thanks
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OMG! Fantastic! I think my hubby and I need to go shopping. Lol. Really enjoyed this one. I get the 'change' from first person to third person and back. It's not really a change. Loved loved loved this write, Ed. Hope to see more of this in your penning future.
Sara
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I'm surprised she could even say that lol. You take us ladies on some erotic rides these days Ed. Who needs shop assistants? lol
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WoW! what a ride! this is one wonderful poem you have penned...I found myself holding my breath and feeling the moment with each wave of your words wow! thanks for the ride
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this was sweet. your work is always great. it's been a while since i read any of your poems but this showed me what i've been missing! this was hot!
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wow this is amazing the imagery is fantastic wow is all i can say xxxx
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You have lived up to your reputation as a Passionate Knight yet again
sensual, loving and just plain hot
No more I can say
everyone else beat me to it, except that your words bring very vivid images to mind for me
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This is Just Well AMAZINGLY HOT, SEXY, and well need I say more? This was just the most passionate and sexually arousing piece I have read so far!!! Truly a masterpiece to enheighten the senses to a whole new level!!
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Woa!! BABY!!
Man was you in my dressing room today???? If so , Im buying that damn teddy. This was full of well enticed passion. A very sensually, arousing piece.*no pun intended *giggles* This was hot, steamy, sexy. Well penned.
Best wishes
Tory
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Nice...
Delicious poem; hidden vourism. Interesting use of your words and spacing. You did, however, change view points from first person to third, and back to first person again right in the middle of the poem.
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Wow!
How awesomely intense and passionate this is! Geez!
(fans self)
Very well done, my friend! This is wonderfully erotic! -
Well Damn....
Well needless to say...I am literally gushing with dressing room envy.....
.....gotta love those dressing rooms....thanks for giving me a wet sigh....much love to you....smiles, Terry
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Oh, this is so good my dear. A lovely stroll through the mall, and fantasies will appear. I shall have to go shopping more.....
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ELECTRIFYING-MAGNIFYING
EXCELLENT POEM YOU BOOGER!!! YOU HAD IT ALL ALONG! I KNEW IT...AND OF COURSE, I 'LOVE IT'!! I'M SURE YOU WILL GET 'MANY READS ON THIS ONE, AND [PROMT-COMMENTS')AS WELL.....MAGNIFICENT JOB, WELL-DONE!!!WHAT 'DELICIOUS-POEMS' YOU CREATE!!!! ANOTHER FABULOUS WRITE'.....'GOD BLESS YOU' MR.PASSIONATE KNIGHT'! YOU KEEP ME 'GASPING FOR MORE!!!!! LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW..............................................(AIR-PLEASE)........AH....
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