The things I thought versus the things I got
The thoughts I loved versus the thoughts I lost
The thoughts were there, but where was there?
Thoughts of us; thoughts of despair
I thought I could move on without you;;
without you by my side
I thought I could do a lot of things;;
but I guess I lied
Thoughts fill my head through clouded eyes
Thoughts of everything I've always despised
Thoughts of perfect days;;
gone oh-so wrong
The vision so twisted;;
It was warped all along.
The things I thought versus what we knew
the thoughts of us versus the thoughts of you
The thoughts dissolved, left to rot
Thoughts of everything you were not...
A contest entry
- Anything && Everything (Shoot me up side the head) --all ages-- by Marilyn..
475 points, ended August 11, 2007, 58 entries
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applaud, applaud, applaud, and another applaud!!!!!!!!!
This is masterful!!!!! I devoured every word!!!!!!!!
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OMG!
This poem so reminded me of my ex...
for the longest time, i was trying to form into words what you just did
[you took the breath right outta me]
keep writing and I thank you for not entering a prewritten poem
*kudos*
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This is deeper than I would have thought from the title. Its great. No one but you knows what its saying. Well I guess some people know. I do but I shouldnt but do. Anyways what I'm trying to say is the poem is deep in a way that only conserns the people who know what it is saying but at the same time meaningful to everyone who reads it. It is one of those types that catches everyone who reads it. It truely captures the attention of everyone who reads. Great job on this. I'm here for support though I dont know how much I can provide. I promise to do the best I can but maybe my best is'nt good enough in this petucular situation as you already know. We have become great friends over the past few weeks though I know a friend can never fix the dameges done I still want you to know I am here for whatever good a friend may do. Wrighting too much already I would just like to say this is a very powerful peice and I really think you did a lot of good everwhere with it. Truely a great write.
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I really love this!!!
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thank you <33
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