Tears trickled down my cheeks
and you just stood there,
staring,
not knowing what to do,
having let loose
all your pent up anger
and left with nothing else to say.
I should have
found the perfect retort
right away:
Feelings burned my throat,
as old as our friendship,
as young as my tears...
But no words.
So I just stood there,
tears dribbling down my cheeks,
tiny drops of pain--
pain as old as the stars
but new to me.
And you still stood there,
staring,
waiting.
Author notes
Inspired by the quote "poetry must be as new as foam and as old as rock"
I'm sort of "letting out my inner pain" here , but also trying to show how it takes a mix of emotions--old and new-- to make someone have a breakdown.
A contest entry
- Eternal Newness - a quote inspired poetry contest by thelordreigns.
450 points, ended July 6, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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u like your poem is very good my fav part wss..
Feelings burned my throat,
as old as our friendship,
as young as my tears...
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Nice piece here. I felt the same way at Lawrence
losingmymind
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Thanks.
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i love this!!!! been on both ends of that type fight, being both the one shocked by the other persons words and shocking the person with my words. just amazing
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Wonderful entry
I love the way you were able to personalize the quote and write a very meaningful emotional poem. I understand the "pain as old as the stars/ but new to me' and the "feelings...as old as our friendship/as young as my tears."
Thank you so much for this beautiful entry.
Love and hugs
- joanne
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