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Narcolepsy Dessert

She believed she made an error
The lines before her eyes
swirled like juicy gumdrops
it was a surprise

the hours ticked till eight
the dream continued on
the streets were endless
the lights flickered
the world did prolong

but when she awoke
it was no longer a memory
she yawned
and went to get dressed
the only thing left of the dream
was the subconscious mess

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  • FallingTwilight
    July 5, 2007
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    Thank you very much


  • FallingTwilight
    July 5, 2007

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    Wow, great job on this. I love the vivid emotion and imagery in this piece. Please put your option in the author's notes.

    Best of luck,

    FallenPoeticAngel