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Present Projected

Embraced,
as moon shines
like sun,
only reflecting

memories’ past…


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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    July 5, 2007

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    a wonderful write which creates a strong image and view in the readers mind. i loved how you sum it up at the end. another wonderful write well done


  • Hadji Murad
    July 5, 2007

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    This turned out lovely. It has a delicate tone to it that I like. The embraced thing though is hard to understand, it's unclear. And also though, memories don't have a past, memories are a reflection of the past. Poetically though this is really good.


  • Lyre-Bird-
    July 5, 2007
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    hey slowie get ur ass cracking

  • Lyre-Bird-
    July 5, 2007
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    PROMPT - 'under the same night sky'

  • Lady Eventide
    July 5, 2007
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    Good luck.

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