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My Demise

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I lived in a world of dark grey shadows
To the end of night I would cry to sleep
Troubled spirits that walk the land
In a world of hate and souls to keep

Storming Rain

 

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 upon the ground


Mud of graves then begin to rise
Creatures of the night wake to walk

presence of life hidden indisguise

 

Walking corpses of lively spirits

Their duty to hunt and hurt

Until the rising sun approaches

to cower back under the dirt

 

The morning sunlight shines it's glory

And the creatures hide in its fears

Sunlight; in the event of my demise

I fade as my dark world disappears

 

 

 



 

Author notes

HAPPY B-DAY TO YOU!

This is a way I choose to express how I feel. Sometimes I feel like im trapped in a world that I dont want to be in. My inspiration came from the movie "Silent hills" when the creatures of the night come out during night and when the sun shines in the morning all the troubles fade away.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 27, 2007
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    It's a little bit negative for my liking in most parts, considering this is a contest to try and cheer me up. No matter anyway, thanks for entering and making me understand and feel how you feel, though I am used of it myself already. Liked the picture there, too.

  • Faithcomesin
    July 5, 2007

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    wow, powerful

    Thanks for the entry. Very dark and quite
    powerful...Your words so smoothly written. A world of darkness that no one else sees, its meaning to you, an eye opener for others to see, and feel.
    I never saw the movie, so Im gonna go and rent it tonight.So I will be back to comment more tomorrow.....
    amanda


  • xXLoveXx
    July 5, 2007

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    this is so dark and i loved it! you did a great job and i hope you do good in the contest! GREAT WORK!


  • robert bolin
    July 5, 2007

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    Damn one of the most powerful dark poems in ap's history, very powerful and the images are totaly kick ass, thank you for sharing this with all of us here on ap and allowing me to read and comment on your work and also to you for reading and commenting on mine.