Knowing I cant do a thing
I Listen to her screams as I sit in my room
I shake and i cry in fear of him
"Please dont hurt my mommy" is all ask
I plead and i bicker as he strikes her with no remorse
I run into the bedroom and call 911
I plead to them to save my mommy
Save her from the pain and suffering she feels
He rushes in
"Please dont hurt me daddy,Im still your little girl"I plead in desperation
He has mommy by her hair and bleeding as she tells me to run and get help
I see him slice her throat
As blood gushes to the floor I cry and say "Kill me too,I need mommy"
He takes the knife and slices my wrist
He called it a favor to me
Suddenly I dont feel so good
I start to get dizzy
And cant breathe
Suddenly it gets black
Maybe if I die I can see mommy again and maybe she wont have no pain
Jesus can make him pay for his sins
The angels can watch over her
XIll see you there mom please save a place for me in heavenX
A contest entry
- Asleep or Dead [ poems that changed your life ] by gasolinequeen.
525 points, ended July 16, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, this is incredible... You did an amazing job with this.
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Awesome! Loved the different theme and the portrayal of emotions...
Hugz,
Sunflower.
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It follows a pattern I have seen a lot of, but your descriptions were different and I enjoyed reading this piece. The only thing I disliked was your use of a number instead of a word when you said "Kill me 2," because it seemed unprofessional. However, the poem itself was well done ^_^ Thank you for entering, and best of talent in the contest!
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luved it
it was such a good poem it was like i was watching it happen very discriptive good job
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you definetely pulled on my heart. i absolutely love it. so tragic...but beautiful. great write!
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wow, this was heartwrenching.. you absolutely tugged at my heart, and ripped it out saying this is how it is and it will never change.. but it will change, im sure of it.. things will get better, i hope the best for you
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