white linen
stained by blood…
drops of excited crimson liquid
smeared on protected virgin fabric
and no soaking, scrubbing or scouring
could give back the unspoiled childhood
white linen of purity
stained by blood of lust…
calloused hands, disjointed knuckles
resulted from washing this tainted cloth
but no drenching, bleaching or rinsing
could give back the unblemished innocence
my white linen of purity
stained by your blood of lust…
and no washing could ever make me clean
the stain is a proof of my abused body
and no cleansing could ever make me purify
your stain is an emblem of my violated soul
Author notes
kathleen paragas
small voices...big screams...stop child abuse
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WELL DONE. Fantastic imagery and a powerful write. Thankyou SO much for entering this piece.
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What imagery~ what profound words~ Not such a little voice with this write. This just screams out in pain. Your words are so vivid. They break bones, shatter voices, and breaks that shaken appeal. This write is definitely one in many. I am speechless for the most part.
Thanks for your entry.
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wonderful, deeply emotional and descriptive. I however think : my white linen of purity
stained by your blood of lust…
can do without the ...... that we feel anyways, no need to add that
well done though!!! thanks for entering!
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I agree with Friday.
This is painfully beautiful
and I love you repetition,
it adds alot.
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I've read this several times and I'm still not sure what to say. I like it, your imagery is past intense, but it leaves me sort of speechless...
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this is tragic and sadly, sounds like it is written from experience. i do hope the experience truly wasn't yours
i love the way this was written though, especially the refrain how in every stanza it was added to a little more. it gave this so much more dimension. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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absolutley aweosme darling
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realy good, thanx for entering
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Excellent Poem,Indeed
AWESOME POEM, LOVE IT.THIS IS TRULY BEAUTIFUL, AND I LOVE THE WAY, YOU EXPRESSED THE WORDING.MAGNIFICO!!!.'GOD BLESS YOU'.LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW-RAYTOWN,MO...............................
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A very good write. Extremely touching. Nice imagery.
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:]!!!
Great poem!
I'm scared that I enter!
This is really great. I love the metaphor.
Amazing!
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"drops of excited crimson liquid
smeared on protected virgin fabric
and no soaking, scrubbing or scouring
could give back the unspoiled childhood"
Wow.
This is a serious issue/Meaning.
I hope you get through it.
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wow, this is really good. I love the metaphor you used and your descriptions were great. I like how you varied the words you used for linen and blood and didn't make it repetitive. This is a sad poem and filled with emotion but it's wonderful. Thanks for entering.
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