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Snow Hill

 

 

 

Beyond the Happy Valley

Where is heard the robin's trill

A place of timeless beauty lies

A place they call Snow Hill

 

She rests there now in silence

'Neath the cape of winter's chill

A solitary testament

Bereft of life, and still

 

And what can break that silence

Touched by neither pen nor quill

That silence, now, is deafening

Its keening wail is shrill

 

Betrayal, with her buried,

Leaves its story unfulfilled

Until that final Judgement Day

It lingers...quite...still

 

Beyond the Happy Valley

Where is heard the robin's trill

A place of timeless beauty lies

A place they call Snow Hill

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                 © copyright 2005  paula dagnel

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  • Lowell Poe
    December 5, 2009

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    Oh lass...
    a timeless piece of art,
    commenting so sweetly on my work
    has given me this wonderful opportunity
    to read yours....

    Betrayal, with her buried,
    Leaves its story unfulfilled
    Until that final Judgement Day
    It lingers...quite...still

    so clearly do i see her resting place on in the cold of winter..
    i love this because you incorporate so much,
    nature, love ,betrayal, redemption.....
    a life left in the balance of her mortal ending....

    She rests there now in silence
    Neath the cape of winter's chill
    A solitary testament
    Bereft of life, and still..

    The rhythm is so perfect I could not help but read it aloud..
    I shall go mad if you change one word of this little gypsy,
    you are a writer that turns words to paintings...
    and now you have gained another loyal reader.....
    this makes your comment valued so knowing you are truly a poet...
    your golden image looked beautiful besides my work lass..
    thank you....
    You should be proud...
    this is stunning!
    Help yourself to more of my work...
    your comments are articulate and full of insite.

    Bless you
    little gypsy,
    Liam



    • LdyBrknWing gold member
      December 6, 2009
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      Thank you so much, Liam, for your kind words for "Snow Hill." They are most appreciated. I don't know that I'm a "proper poet," but it's definitely good to know that you enjoyed it. I intend to come back to your pages, as well, as I truly enjoyed the beautiful piece I read. Thanks again for taking the time to read, and for being so kind.


      Paula


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    December 1, 2009

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    Lovely...


    I did like this composition... "Snow Hill" sings the magic of Nature. All in this poem glitters, — touching, inspiring and enchanting.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

  • La Kajira gold member
    November 20, 2009

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    This read like a gentle sad melody. The flow of this is absolutely impeccable with imagery and emotion that lingers well after reading. Excellent skill for sure


  • poetryality silver member
    November 2, 2009

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    There is a melancholy voiced pitched into the air from these well chosen rhyming words. The slumber of those put to their final rest is covered in the snow. I hear the song of the bird here dear sister. I discovered my love for winged creatures was not by happenstance. I am from the Bird Clan within the Choctaw nation. I feel flight and the kinship between us revealed in these words. Beauteous, even in its saddened veil.


    Always with Love ♥

    Renee


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 21, 2009

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    Perfect rhythm and rhyme make this sad read quite beautiful. You’ve penned a wonderfully tragic narrative with grace and style. Thanks so much for entering my contest. It’s an honor read your fine work!


  • individuality gold member
    May 15, 2009

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    a good piece of poetry - a calm narrative/atmosphere here, the flow of the soul uner the soil - snow hill, that's a great name


  • thepoetssoul
    December 31, 2008

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    This is a fine piece of poetry you have written.
    I love the imagery and rhyme within.
    If your going any time soon Id like to come along
    To snow hill
    Be blessed in all you do sweet soul.

    Tony


  • OceanSleeper
    November 14, 2008

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    tranquil sad beauty

    wow, loved this! I haven't been in the poetry 'scene' for a while and this was a great read to get me back in! I loved the pace of the rhythm and rhyme on this, to me it was so tranquil which totally reflected the feelings and imagery of the poem, to me i found some kind of peaceful sadness in this but i also ended with some kind of hope and optimism there was just some light. I'll stop trying to explain myself as its not going so well clearly! But anyway just wanted to say that it was awesome, thanks
    take care xSleeperx


  • queenie gold member
    November 6, 2008

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    just wanted to read something from my favorite poetess and this satisfied my desire greatly.you still amaze me.this form you use to pen this piece is a tricky one but you made it seen so easy.loved this


  • Metaphorist
    January 4, 2008

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    You managed a tough rhyme scheme without sounding forced and repetition without losing my interest. Good job! I enjoyed it.

    Thanks for entering. Good luck in my contest and in the New Year.

  • Sector-Hunter
    January 4, 2008

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    This was a sad poem reading it you can feel all your emotions great work on this I hope you do good in the contest lots of love SH


  • RockinToyotaChick
    July 5, 2007
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    beautifully sad

    This is quite moving. Makes me think of my own passage through a life I sometimes don't understand.


  • leo2
    July 5, 2007

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    Beautifully sad and so very touching.
    A moment time just can't kill
    Sadly I know of much similar place
    Although it is called Boot Hill.

    Excellent work Paula

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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