she is average in every conceivable way
not a beauty, but good looking
not a talent, but good at several things
not a wit, but good humoured
what you notice
are her perceptive eyes
and the kindness
in her quiet smile
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest - 2 hours, 20 lines, 20 entries by Maatkara.
450 points, ended July 17, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The title, that is excellent for it's an effective contrast and conformation of your poem's meaning.
You show me a kind, gentle person and I will show you an extraordinary human being, for those aren't easy qualities to come by or maintain and besides, anyone who does more listening than talking must have learned a lot...and as I said, are exceedingly rare!
But I did get your point (I just had fun traveling my own way for a bit) there is beauty to be seen, if we are willing to see it...or know how...and often beauty is not necessarily what the masses define it to be.
I bub too much.
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I have painted a picture of "her" on my mind's screen and truly enjoy the view ... it brought the exact same quiet smile onto my lips ...
thank you for sharing wisdom through simplicity,
maa
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Very Good!
These quickie contests are showing up more and more often, if my muse is in the mood sometimes I can pull it off, this one is interesting. This piece goes to show you not everyone wears their beauty on the outside.
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Thank you Dawn! I think real beauty is only on the inside - and there are beauties everywhere! 
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Oh wait, the contest isn't judged yet. lol My bad. Well hey, you still have a chance. Best of luck.
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Beautiful poem. I like how you listed what you were talking about, in a sense, but pulled it off effectively. The flow here was nice, and was at a good pace. A bit simpler from others that I've read of yours, but the simplicity of this is what makes it, well, what it is- and it is good.
Great quickie poem. This didn't win a trophy, but it is a winner in my eyes.
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Hehe, thanks for the good luck charm! this poem won my second silver trophy.
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Yes the most ordinary of people can have qualitys that stand out amongst the rest, this was well written! Hugs, Kelly
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Short but nice and effective description. Some people are simply looking like that but their soul is always shining
~Sonja~
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Very effective poem, gently powerful in it's reminder of what is really important and impresses the most - kindness and empathy.
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My mother's best friend is like this, ordinary, but indispensable. Thanks for reminding me of her - good luck!
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