Twilight
Delicate bloom
Petals arouse silence
As butterflies glide wistfully
Vaguely
Wings widen the innocent night
Simplicity lingers
Of tender awe
Poignant
In a list
A contest entry
- Butterfly Cinquains by azure85.
600 points, ended July 18, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I don't think I've ever read or heard of a Butterfly Cinquain but this is truly lovely
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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I'm guessing this is some kind of structure poem. I like it's simple and sweet like most of mine. good work UNT.
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This was absolutely beautiful. You did an excellent job on the cinquain. I almost detected a bit of alliteration in there as well, but it may be coincidental. Awesome poem!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Nice. Short, beautiful and I love the topic. Butterflies! What can be better than that!
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a soft, and beautiful image you've painted here with your words, well deserving of a trophy! well done
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This is a lovely and delicate piece, full of the beauty of the butterfly. Thank you so much for your wonderful butterfly cinquain.
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This is beautiful, such lovely imagery and so eloquent, Good Luck to you in the contest and all the best~
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wow, i like the feeling that this poem has, especially the line "simiplicity lingers". the title is also interesting and i wonder why you chose it. nice job on this, and good luck in the contest!
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Beautiful.Simply beautiful!
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TO BE ABLE TO TAKE IN ALL OF YOUR SURROUNDINGS IS A GIFT. I DONT REMEMBER THE LAST TIME IVE DONE THIS AND IM ONLY 18. I AM ALERT BUT JUST NOT TO NATURE. I THINK THIS IS BEAUTIFUL BECAUSE ITS SOMETHING IM JUST NOT USED TO. SIMPLICITY LINGERS OF TENDER AWE, I LOVE THIS LINE BECAUSE THE WORDS ARE DELICATE. THIS POEM ACTUALLY MAKES ME THINK OF FLEECE COVERS STRAIGHT OUT OF THE DRYER. IT JUST SEEMS SO SENSUAL AND SOFT LIKE A 1 MONTH OLD BABY WRAPPED IN HER WINNIE THE POOH BLANKET, IT'S JUST REAL SWEET. I LOVE IT.
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This is really nicely written. Until recentley I didn't know what a cinquain was but now I do. And this is fun to read I liked it. Great job keep it up.
Never give up
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Great
It's so beautiful even though it's so short. You have some real talent there. =]
Although the word "clearless" is kind of perplexing, I don't think it's a real word... =/ -
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hehe, tnx. yeah, i know clearless isn't a word, i just wanted to see if someone would notice that XD glad you're that someone. i changed it just awhile ago and made it 'vaguely' instead
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Woohoo, I'm perceptive. =D XD
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This poem is great.
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Gorgeous
It takes some talent to be able to pull off the "pastoral beauty" type of poem. I am reminded of the times I hung around outside and absorbed every (pleasant) thing in my surroundings. "Mild Butterflies" makes me nostalgic for when I was still a kid, and still had a backyard to go out to.
Twilight is my favorite time of day, so I also might be a bit biased in my affection for this poem. (I usually hate poems about dawn. Who wants to be awake for dawn?)
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