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Always Never



Shredded fog engulfs the night;

forming shadow images of

terrors and fright, until the

incandesce of a cold speckled moon drips,

piercing dreams with iced tips.

Hope carried by laughter and smiles,

lost in the dark and covered with bites,

a blood trail discovery to rusted gutters

as a shocking twist reveals the soul;

I begin to wonder if I am in control.

Investigation leads to dank and grimy places

until desperate pleas screams from the trees;

vanishings now more abound.

I was awakened to these shadows with a soft moan

to battle my demons my sin… alone.

A symbol wasn't etched into flesh

but formed by violent volition,

the night I was chosen by pricks in the neck,

my destiny and a destination, unveiled

standing here ready no longer concealed.

I've learned to harness my hate of

the despicable lies of malice scripts;

fallible truths and breaths of disease,

So I may hunt the creatures that stalk the night

and survive the day of those that stalk in the light.

To be a singularity,

is to be a being who is in need of nothing,

while at the same time,

a being who is in need of everything,

a beauty born from deaths sting.

 

Author notes

had trouble editing, so I created it new, again

Option 2, pic 4, title - Always Never, word bank -
fog, screams, gutters, trees, blood, shocked, shredded, grimy,rusted, dripping.



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Comments

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  • Catacomb
    February 6

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    Very well done! Love your style. I like the darker parts of the poem especially. Can't wait to read more of your work!!

  • Little-Buster gold member
    February 6
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    Nice.
    i love the rhyme.
    keep up the good work!

    -Buster


  • Talking Toni gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    WOW!!!!!

    Wow Jacen...this was gripping and captivating from start to finish...A dark side of you written from the perspective of vampires I would suspect..very good use of metaphors and vocabulary here creating such vivid imagery and bringing the story of death to life if you will...Thanks for sharing a great job revising as well!!!~~Toni~~

  • know one
    August 11, 2008
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    nice

    I like the theam of the poem and there was some nice use of rhyme in here,thanks for entering!

  • ennovy silver member
    September 6, 2007

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    Dark purity, vivid pictures of vile enjoyment..You have created a very excelent piece of work...Thanks for entering my contest....May your fangs forever be sharp.......novy
  • mama-drama
    August 2, 2007

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    Wow...the picture says a lot.Then the background, and finally the words.

    am a singalarity,
    for I am a being who is in need of nothing,
    while at the same time,
    abeing who is in need of everything,
    a beauty born from deaths sting

    Those are very personal words,which many girls can feel. and I think this poem is a classic.
    Its really deep

    . Rewarded 6


  • unraveled
    July 20, 2007

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    that is such an awesome picture. i really love the line "a symbol wasn't etched into flesh but formed by violent volition" you have really great word usage in here, i liked this piece. the rhyming is a little weird in some places and you could use meter to make it better, and you don't really have a set rhyme scheme. for example, the place where you rhymed moan and alone could be made better. good luck in the contest!
    <3cassidy

    . Rewarded 8


    • IndividualEleven
      July 20, 2007
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      thanks for the comments, your right i didnt really have a rhyme scheme, infact it was only the 4th and 5th, and 9th and 10th lines that rhymed, for each stanza, and if you have any suggestions for moan and alone, ill be open to it.

  • porphyry
    July 14, 2007

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    my vote for gold

    this is my favorite in the contest
    so descriptive and unique
    a symbol wasn't etched into flesh
    but formed by violent volition
    my favorites of many outstanding lines


  • Demoneyes
    July 9, 2007

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    Pretty Good!

    Extremely good as always. Beautiful pic and beautiful imagery. lol. The only thing that messes with me is that it ryhmes. Sorry but that's just me. lol. But great job.

    • IndividualEleven
      July 9, 2007
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      ah, but if you look closly it only the 4th and 5th lines and 9th and 10th lines, the rest is free write, i mixed it up. but thanks for the comment much appreciated.

  • Black Raevyn
    July 8, 2007
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    Good Work

    Very good as always. I like your use of words and rhyme. Good luck in the contest.

  • February Moon gold member
    July 5, 2007

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    Perfect, seriously beautiful. Greatly written, I love this, all of it. Great use of title, words, and picture. Best of luck, and thank you for entering.
    Chelsea
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