pipe dreams evolve
in earth tones
fully awakened by the hush
of distant humming birds
Inspire my platitude
with renewal
joyous elevating
of stick-people
hue painted
softly risen to touch
reality's cloud soaring
just below my better ideals
A contest entry
- Quickie - Picture For Your Pens by Ryno.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hmm your phrasing is very indepth and profound... you've touched on a few very moving, and powerful images... nice job with phrasing and a strongly put poem... very insightful. Nice work and thank-you for the entry.
Ryan -
seems like life is shapin up artistically...really felt you in the 2nd stanza where it appears the vision is becomin more skillful or realistic..or both. loved the last stanza. it stands out as my favorite in this write..especially the last 2 lines. excellen
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I like what you've come up with from the graphic art. There are some excellent visual images here. Your words flow evenly and without interruption. I wish you good luck in the contest.
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Very nice depiction!
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