You are always the one
to dive into my eyes
The first to notice pain
to sense turmoil inside
No hesitation in the darkness
Drifting beside me among tears
and if ever you were afraid
You still protected me from fear
Knowing we'll fall from my eyes
Uncertain where we'll land
You'll insist we journey together
Always, taking my hand...
Author notes
Pisces Pieces
A contest entry
- Friends are forever~ Contest for my friends on AP only~ by Angel With No Halo.
800 points, ended July 12, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Yeah...this is beautiful!
I wish I had a friend like this...hahahaha
"Knowing we'll fall from my eyes"
I find this line interesting and a little complexing
How did you think of this?
I mean shit...it has almost inspired me enough to write a poem...almost!
Before...oh yeah...I deffinately would have come up with something
Ah...maybe I still will...who knows
Keep them comin!
Much Love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Wow, I really loved the feeling
that I got from reading this poem
of yours. Wonderful work here and
good luck to you with it in the
contest my friend! Keep it up!
Jeremy0826 -
This is very beautiful, and well done. I love friends like this and the devotion. Great job and the best of luck in the contest
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This is beautifully stated and you have said volumes in so little words. Sometimes the most sincere sentiments come with few words. Very well done. This touched my heart and made me think of friends that know me better than I seem to know myself..
Best of luck to you in the contest...see this a meriting many great rewards...
Dawn
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You should be more proud of your work my dear. This was lovely to say the least. Your words fit together perfectly, the rhyme and flow were excellent and you just did an all around great job with this... what is there to worry about?? Have more faith in your words sweety!! You are an amazing poet and I love you for that and for being such a wonderful person!!
Love,
~Krys~
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Well, that was fast. I just got what i just asked for...??? LOL. Cool.
Now my favorite part was definatly the first verse, although all of it was great and flowed together wonderfully. But I liked the way you wrote the first part, its more different. Although, the whole thing was great. Short, but still beautiful. Always sweet and honest, and so much more.
And I can always relate. And I know what you mean, I hate limiting my words, its just so dang hard.
I might write one tonight if I get inspired enough. lol. Or just pick one from my book, not sure.
AMAZING job, as it always seems to be.
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