You are my drug of choice
You are my fatal addiction
When I'm with you, jubilation, rejoice
When your gone, friction, affliction
Your scent is my cocaine
Your arms, my ecstasy
Your kiss gets me drunker than champagne
With you, it's hard to abstain
I am a horrible addict
Wanting you, needing you
This hangover you inflict
Is worth the high you strew
I hunger for you, I ache for you
I can hardly wait for the next fix
I will do anything to get you
No matter what moral it conflicts
I am overly addicted
(But your overly addictive)
I am gone beyond redemption
I can't stand to be with anyone
You, of course, being the exemption
Without you, I'd be looking down the barrel of a gun
Extreme? Maybe
But I'm telling you the truth
You're all I got to live for baby
In my exaggerated, tragic youth
So come on
And give me another hit
Where have you gone?
Don't think I can take it?
I'm immune to your side effects
Your hangovers, are nothing
Without you, I'm wrecked
But with you, I'm everything
Everything I've ever wanted to be
Smart and sassy
Charming and pretty
Independent and classy
The perfect version of me
I'm far too gone to stop now
(And you're gone too far to stop me)
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900 points, ended July 13, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
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thank you for your entry.
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Fantastic
It can be soooo damaging to become addicted to a person. I know exactly how you feel..I think it is much worse than having a drug addiction. People are far more devious and deceptive. The is great and I'm extremely critical....
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An excellent metaphorical poem and a joy to read. You intoxicate your reader with your words and make love sound like the only drug that will ever be needed.
Congratulations on the gold trophy, well deserved.
Take care...Sue
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its pretty damn good...i tell ya what...i love how you used the analogy of addiction for someone you love...or maybe it is about drugs and im being stupid...i dont know, but coming being an addict myself(of many things may i add) its exactly like this...i love it...and it flows very well....great write...
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I know where your coming from.Abstinance is a right bugger to achieve. Thank you for your words
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Exaggerated Well
You paint with bold, vivid verbal strokes to get us almost as inebriated on your poem as you are with your affections. The variations in line length and rhythm underline your off balance, staggering addiction. Very Good Write! Good luck in the contest
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Nicely written- the flow is good, and the word choice fits the context. Some people don't like parenthesis in poems, but I'm not one of those. I like the feeling of conspiracy they give. Insight, in a sort of 'aside'. The actual message of the poem is scary- but too true in a lot of ways. That all consuming feeling- on the edge of madness- is a place we've all been- or nearly been. I'm pleased to say that I've never actually succumbed to it- but I know plenty who have. Well done on the poem!
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this one has to be one of the best I have read so far! man i just can't get over how powerful your words were. The third stanza was a perfect portrayal of addiction to a certain person. and the ninth was excellent, shows a lot of power and restraint. keep it up.
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When I think of a comment good enough for this one... I'll get back to you.
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i really like this because the relationship that love and drugs share is often overlooked. few people realize how similar the two can be, but this piece makes one think of that comparison. loved it. Tim
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I'm blown away
You were drunk when you wrote this? wow. This is still amazing... when I'm high, i write better. I love the fact you incorporated drugs, and used--- either similies or metaphors. I loved this, and i dont exactly say it often. I hope to read more from you. Thank you for entering!
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i have to comment it again cuz its just perfect.
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this is perfect.
like, i cant even explain how every word in this is true.
i LOVEEE this.
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Beyond amazing
i love it love it to death
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and i get it =]
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This was amazing. Beyond amazing. I love it.
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"Your scent is my cocaine
Your arms, my ecstasy
Your kiss gets me drunker than champagne
With you, it's hard to abstain"
"I will do anything to get you
No matter what moral it conflicts
I am overly addicted
(But your overly addictive)"
"I'm far too gone to stop now
(And you're gone too far to stop me)"
I wish I could put this whole poem in quotes, but I can't.
These lines are my favorite.
The best of the best.
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