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Where honey drips

A robin sang his song to me

he sang so bright, so joyously

I listened close, then touched his tree

he must feel free, he must feel free 

~

A rabbit heard and stood so tart

he looked just like a work of art

Thumping his foot, doing his part

it touched my heart, it touched my heart 

~

That’s when I saw a little bear

he was dark brown with fuzzy hair

He did a jig while standing there

then whiffed the air, then whiffed the air 

~

And all the forest stood up strong

all dancing with the robin’s song

I felt at home - like I belong

this can’t be wrong, this can’t be wrong 

~

The forest trees do all contrive

with animals that truly thrive

Where honey drips from paper hives

I felt alive, I felt alive  

~

Bobcat arose from bed of straw

licking her cub and then her paw

With saucer eyes and gapping jaw

I stood in awe, I stood in awe

I felt at peace, by forest stream

my heart was captured in its beam

Forever caught within this theme

living a dream, living a dream

~

 

 

 

 

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  • nilav
    April 10, 2008
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    tasting the sweet honey i feel my heart dancing with the robin's song....i am in awe of your poem..


  • PersephoneInWinter
    March 13, 2008

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    HOODWINKED!

    i love the imagery in this. it is so gentle and descriptive. your tone is so peaceful. i love how you captured a beautiful moment within your stunning words.

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 22, 2007

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    Very beautiful write, flowing and with the refrains of the monotetrs, very powerfully resounding. I love nature, though I thought for a moment too, that I would surely love to witness the bear and the bobcat from a distance with full assurance that the bobcat was fed and that the bear wasn't having a bad (possibly carnivorous) moment . We can witness wildlife with appriciation and awe, but turning the tables on myself, I imagine they view us as a threat.


    Still, a highly enjoyable poem.

    Sending s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

  • Soulwindow
    December 12, 2007

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    You do it for me ...

    I am in awe, I am in awe
    of little bird, and bearcub claw
    You take me there from Aussie land
    I bow my head .. and clap my hands

    just thought I approach the theme 'down under' style

    Klassy told me I'd love your work ... she is right!


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 11, 2007

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    Interesting format this is.
    It's the first I've seen like this.
    But I love it!
    This would work so well for children's writings or for someone to read this out loud to children.
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


    • FifthDove
      December 11, 2007
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      Thanks Bill, I fell head over heals in love with this form, I love writing for children and this is a perfect for to hold their attention and make them smile Try it, you will love it Thanks for the feedback and claps


  • capricornpoet
    September 28, 2007

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    sweetness

    A tale of nature through a robin's song to your soul, full of the gentleness you inspire..lovely, a treat
    of the magical .

  • Gott ist tot
    September 25, 2007
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    Good nature poem with good use of rhyme and repetition. Congrats on the trophies.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    August 31, 2007

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    This makes me want to bang my head against the wall and let the words inside pour out as I have been having trouble picking up a pen lately. The words are there, but I guess my heart isn't in it at the moment. I love the flow here. I just want to lay down and rest awhile on your pages.
    ♥ Touchof1der

    • FifthDove
      August 31, 2007
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      A poem for you dear sister

      Come rest your wings

      Come rest your wings within my nest
      I’ll coo a song, I’ll sing my best
      To give you dreams, of happiness
      Within my nest, within my nest

      And when the day turns to the night
      You will have won your inner fight
      So spread your wings and just take flight
      Into the night, into the night

      All Nature hears, so sing your song
      It doesn’t matter, right or wrong
      You will end up where you belong
      So sing your song, so sing your song

      Within my nest, come rest your wings
      Respect and love, all living things
      And feel the wonders this life brings
      Come rest your wings, come rest your wings


      Love you Dove


  • heygoo
    August 29, 2007

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    You seem to have penned a fine example of this new form. This would be a delightful children's book with some beautiful watercolor (or other soft media from) illustrations. The moments spent reading this piece were a splendid pause in my day. Thank you for sharing this.


  • Partners In Crime
    August 1, 2007
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  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    August 1, 2007

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    Wow..this is just a fantastic poem...and to speak with some others here...can I order this book overseas too

    Good luck in this contest
    XXJeannette


  • catz Moderators member
    July 23, 2007
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    I love this, my friend. It's a gorgeous work of art. And the form is perfect, I must try this

    The poem itself is wonderful, lighthearted, amazing imagery, a perfect children's poem

    Good luck in the contest, this sure looks like a winner to me.

    love and
    Dee


  • Desire gold member
    July 22, 2007

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    Wow!

    Wonderful weaving of words and I knew this would take home a shiny after first inhalation
    I don't think I have tried this particular form
    before...
    Congratulations on Your Trophy win Dove
    Love the form used and the message You have shared
    with us
    Beautifully penned

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Swan song gold member
    July 21, 2007

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    WOW! Not only is this a discriptive poem that singles out images clearly it sings and it chants in rhythmn and meter. I really like this poem very good I will and want to read this again


  • Diminished Capacity gold member
    July 19, 2007
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    Awww

    I love yours. It's so beautiful.

  • Warrior7
    July 14, 2007

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    This is fantastic, so much imagery captured within each sentence, i love it. Yeah i agree with Queen when is your childrens book going to be released ha?! Thankyou for sharing


  • queen Moderators member
    July 5, 2007

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    Im telling you that you should have a childrens book

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