Copulating porcupines of simplistic thought
Demand an explanation for youthful minds
Rhetorical thoughts providing enhanced chaos
Memories of time when all was upside down
Pictures painted in satirical view unfold
Extracting subliminal tonic for a minds eye
Metaphorical delights for some
Understood by only you and I.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie - Picture For Your Pens by Ryno.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really wasn't, honestly, at all sure if I liked this write until the final, mind chaning, poem changing stanza. I really loved the images it portrayed and the word play in this. Nice work and thank-you for the entry.
Ryan -
Now this piece I really loved. For I am a fan of metaphor and the English language used to it's full potential. Splendidly written. Congrats. Good Luck in the contest.
"Extracting subliminal tonic for a minds eye"
The above line, really stuck out at me. Thanks for sharing this one.
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"Extracting subliminal tonic for a minds eye" Love it! You feed us with "mind candy"! Loved this, good luck in the contest!
~Tia
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The picture fits it perfectly. Good luck in the contest. Keep writing!
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mm the thought of copulating porcupines makes me a little uneasy!!! Ouch, not pleasant I would imagine
Interesting abstract piece from you. Love, C
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I love this, Mikey! Such an excellent poem that does such wonderful justice to the photo. This is surely a pure gold! Hugs, Patricia
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