Summer dew and the less-than-perfect humidity
envelopes the curves of your sparkling white dress.
Lace dripping down to the ground,
and the petite droplets of water kiss your collar bone
leaving a trail of diamonds in their wake.
The hill where we first locked lips
has never looked as beautiful as it does in this light.
The rays of your dancing in the first ounce of sunshine,
split my lips apart into a smile.
Heart thundering in the light sprinkles of rain,
each drop a present that the clouds gladly bestow.
Drops cascading away from the sky
from which I swear you came.
Your body twirls with the wind,
fragile movements placing your hair into a gorgeous mess,
light and water mixing on your up-turned face.
Dance for me, atop a hill
in this early morning shower,
where hope and fate collide
and grab us gently by the throat.
Author notes
My prompt was "Lust in the light". It is a very, very good idea, but I am not in that sort of mood. I won't be in that mood for a long while to come. I realize this isn't my best work, but I really did try.
I feel like a lesbian. -.-
I wrote from the point-of-view of a man/boy/whatever.
This is the opposite of my mood, so yeah. I tried.
Thanks for the original prompt, Deviantly so.
I may do something with this later as well. I really do like the idea.
FYI: Amy is not a morning person. =]
A contest entry
- For my Lovlies. by shirk.
1900 points, ended July 21, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love this.
I think you did a wonderful job.
I loved the images you locked into my eyes.
They're very lovely and springey and nostalgic.
And the diamond on the collar bone thing
was orgasmic.
Thanks for your entry.
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I really like the first stanza, but the whole piece is impressive. That is a very good prompt and I think you responded to it well, your imagery is above and beyond.
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Beautiful
This is absolutely beautiful. It makes me think of me in the kind of dress I want to get. Just kidding. But, yes, it's really pretty.
And, no, you don't seem like a lesbian. I didn't even think of it that way until I read where you said that, lol.
You crack me up, Amy. This is great.
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This is beautiful, The imagery is breathtaking, thanks for the great read. You are truly talented. Don't feel like a lesbian every person is beautiful in there own way, doesn't make you gay.
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"I feel like a lesbian. -.-"
Lmao.
Trust me, there's nothing wrong with writing from a male's point of view. I do that a lot. It's easier to capture the beauty and feelings for a female than it is for a male, sometimes.
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Marvelous, my dear. Loved reading this. It made me feel light, romantic.. happy. You'll definitely place high in this contest, I know it. Adored this one.
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Thanks. It was actually quite hard to get it started, but once I had the exact image I wanted in my head, it just sort of came out.
Thanks again.
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I love the way that the refferences to water, literaly make the conjured images of the write flow into one another,and the other elemental reference to wind,gives it a wild free spirited nature...enjoyed it very much...Big love Lifesymbiotic
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Thank you very much.
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