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The Shape of Weathered Tree

Too idle are these hands,
sinking under arms' weight.
Too blank this canvas,
on which I can create.

Colors of every hue
surround me in my state.
But only this burnt crimson,
succeed to seduce and sedate.

Hours loom over
these hands of mine
Shadows cast, 
as these colors I combine.

Laid out upon canvas
Burnt crimson and blue
shapes and strokes take over
and become something long overdue.

The morning sun giving new light,
for what I can now see...
Burnt crimson and blue
in the shape of weathered tree.


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Contest entry...Picture inspired.

A contest entry

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  • Ryno
    July 9, 2007

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    Normally, rhyming poems without syllable count are a big turn off for my poetic taste... but this flows very well and your rhymes are very natural and unforced. You have a great feeling to this poem... like every word was jotted down and you didn't think too much about it... meaning it is a very natural poem, thats what comes to mind as I read it.

    You've done a very good job of portraying the story beyond the picture and I enjoyed this write. Nice job... very well written. Thank-you for the entry.


    Ryan


  • jo-el
    July 7, 2007

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    reading this aloud is pleasure. reminds me of that commercial tryin to sale bipolar medicine where the girl is up all night painting..furiously. and we're supposed to believe that midnight creativity is disorderly lol. really liked the 2nd stanza. infact i think the first stanza starts off with a classic 4 lines. very imaginative way to come at that contest. excellent writ


    • MotherMachineGunn
      July 7, 2007
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      Thank you kindly for taking the time to read this one.
      I love hearing from my readers.

      ~MOtherMachineGunn~


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 6, 2007

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    The title to this piece reached out right away and yoru lines just pulled me in for the rest of the read. What a journey and my pleasure to take, lovely work, simply lovely ~tia

    • MotherMachineGunn
      July 6, 2007
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      SoulfulTia,

      Thank you for the wonderful comment. I am always pleased to affect my readers. Thank you for taking the time to read it over.

      ~MotherMachineGunn~

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