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'74 merlot

a lean to sip
    becomes unbearable

 & two gulps

alleviate

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  • Grunts Girl silver member
    September 24, 2008
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    reminds me definately of someone falling off the wagon


  • z etoile
    February 27, 2008
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    hmm this was pretty cool


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    yeah, a good merlot does that to me as well. . this has a Haiku feel to it...peace


  • Watuwant silver member
    January 23, 2008

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    I didn't find it interesting, but rather delicious. As is wine, even when gulped. Nicely worded...
    peace
    doug


  • Birchwood
    December 16, 2007

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    I have a hard time understanding what is "unbearable." I keep thinking back pain, but the terseness of it imply something more insidious, like alcoholism. A yen to sip becomes unbearable .. a desire to sip ---- it still reads a back pain to me.

    I like the haiku feeling and I like Merlot, too.


  • Zerstort
    September 12, 2007
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    Interesting....

    I like it

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