You invite and allure, filling my head with the empty space of your first impression.
The fire in your cheeks only serves to feed curiosity and enflame the ice in my chest.
Uneven and unnecessary, my absent pulse aches with you nearby.
The breathe of your scent, the echoing void of unknown thoughts, unspoken words, fuels all that I thought no longer remained.
The ice in my chest and flesh warms at your touch, and with you my perpetual youth finally makes me feel young.
You're not for me, I couldn't bear to be the cause of your cooled flesh, but without you I know that I will remain, forever, an angelic face of cold marble without feeling, without flame.
Author notes
This is supposed to be from Edward's point of view. It is how he feels when he is just getting to know Bella and having to choose whether or not to leave before it gets to complicated or stay.
Definitely on Team Edward...though Jacob is really sweet.
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omg i started hypervenalating (sp?)! amazing!
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wow... i dont even know what to say, this was amazing. i particularly like this line:
The fire in your cheeks only serves to feed curiosity and enflame the ice in my chest
wait now i figure out why i liked it so much, considering this is from edwards point of view, these seems like words he would actually speak. i hope that makes sense. it seems like you embodied his character.
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ok. and i will need to know your username and you "team." and there is only one error that i noticed that would throw people off: edward doesn't have a pulse. but other than that i loved it!
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I did say his pulse was unnecessary in the poem, but I get what you're saying and I edited it.
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I've bookmarked this one. You have achieved no small feat, capturing Edward's words. It will remain one of my favorites. Thank you for entering my contest.
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You've captured him perfectly! Oh Edward, you darling misinformed boy. What are we going to do with you? He is very frustrating, isn't he? It makes me so frazzled, wondering what will happen. He says he wants Bella, but would rather not turn her. Boys just don't get girls sometimes. The should communicate more. *frustration*
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so very pretty. I could feel the love and the need between bella and edward in your words. they just sounded as if you were stephenie herself. You captured their relationship perfectly with your words. amazing job and the best of luck to ya. with love and giggles, the white rabbit
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awwww how sad. But very good! I love the ending. good job on this one!
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I love it! Very good poem about Twilight. Oh, and before I forget, go back to the contest page and note rule number six. Great write, anyway!!
~*~Dawn~*~
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