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Savannah



Hidden faces
In the dusky savannah
Clouded by nothing
Yet never seen
Camouflaged
Crying out
Hidden faces

A contest entry

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  • Ryno
    July 9, 2007

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    This has some very powerful and moving imagery for a short write, I really loved your take and originality with the prompt. Nice job and thank-you for the entry.


    Ryan


  • MotherMachineGunn
    July 6, 2007

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    What a refreshing take on the picture. This little ditty is full of imagery you should be proud of.
    Good Luck in the contest.

    ~MotherMachineGunn~


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 6, 2007

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    This felt very sad to me. Like someone who is standing in front of you but invisible...sad, well penned ~tia


  • HeavenScent4U
    July 5, 2007

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    this kind of cries, has a sense of longing to it. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed