Anger trapped within
Has become my torture
My sorrow, my sin
So I will cry
And let my tears
Stain this page
No one understands
No one cares
No one notices what happened
Disappeared and never returned
I hate how I feel
Who I am
And what I will never become
Let me know I have a place
I can call home
Let me know I have a friend
Tell me can you feel it
Anger trapped
Flowing through your veins?
A contest entry
- Give Me Something Dark by Lost Memory.
350 points, ended September 23, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Trapped....... by BeautifulCurse.
600 points, ended December 29, 2007, 33 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Taking it out on you... by Flightless Raven.
1200 points, ended February 14, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hmhmahahaha...
Anger in your veins is power..use it... as for the poem itself, i wasn´t exactly looking for this, but its a unique,and subtle kind of evil..i like it..
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unlike Lost Memory.. i love the picture.. i really think it adds to the prose of the write... you can definately tell that the girl in the pic is going through something internal and its tearing her up... the words in your poem only highten these feelings and bring them to life.. awesome write and good luck..
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hm... this poem was certainly interesting, i didnt like the picture though.... thanks for entering, and good luck
~Nick -
BEFORE I'LL READ YOUR POEM WILL YOU PLEASE PUT WHAT I ASKED IN THE AUTHOR NOTES.. I HAVE NO CLUE WHAT YOUR ENTERING TO BE....!
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This piece is indeed sullen and emotionally scattered. Pain, burrowed in between the lines... I feel the emotions here are constricted, almost as if they were squeezed 'dry'. Delve into your sadness, anger, and pain. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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So very emotional!!! I love the poem and the pic! Thanks for sharing!
Love~
Az
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What is deep in this is the frustration and that in itself gives us a black look to comprehend. A mammoth task here in getting the helpless feel that I feel reading this, Well done. Tony
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Wow, this is pretty deep and sad.
It's such a terrible thing to
have to feel this way every day.
Times like these can be very
heartbreaking and can cause a lot
of pain in one's life. Great work
here, I love this picture that you
found for this. Well done and good
luck to you with it in the contest!
Jeremy0826
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