My days were numbered ever since day one
Now I’m running out of time to borrow
And every second, more time has gone
I’m just hours away from tomorrow
When I first came, the gloom brought me such pain
The darkness choked me like the hangman’s rope
Now I beg for the night time to remain
Those black seconds freezing are my last hope
I’ve been told that everyone makes mistakes
I suppose that my mistake was too much
And now my heart pounds as the morning breaks
Sadly I wait for the sun’s greedy touch
I regret what I’ve done, and now I’ll pay
Yesterday’s gone; now tomorrow’s today
Author notes
Well, that was gloomy...
I like trying to look at things in a vaguely unusual way, and, seeing is night and dark are normally associated with fear and people are waiting for the morning to come I wanted to think about being afraid of the day and wanting the night to stay. This idea's been done before, but it's just the looking at things in a non-traditional way that I like. Trying to give things new roles. Oh dear, I'm sounding exceedingly pompous. Ah, well.
This is my first attempt at a sonnet. It was really hard and I still don't know if I've done it right...
A contest entry
- That time again... sonnets! by Cwm.
400 points, ended July 6, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Muse by someones-muse.
480 points, ended August 22, 2007, 18 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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i liked it good job thankyou for the poem
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My pleasure, thanks for the comment!
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whether it is correctly written I do not have a clue. I only know that it is really a good write. I think you did a wonderful job.
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Thanks ever so much!
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Well...
It's alot better than my first sonnet, that's why i'm willing to pay with my points to get inspired and have good modern examples. Good first try, keep writing them! -
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Thanks! I may give it another go, but they're really tricky...
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