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step into my shoes

Go ahead
Walk a day in my shoes
Suffer my pain
Suffer my heartache
Tell me how you like it
Tell me about the unnecessary criticism
and the broken heart that continues to break
or about the roses that never blooms
like that life that never grows
Go ahead
walk a day in my shoes
And tell me how you like it

Author notes

This is about a friend of mine who has everything but still that isn't enough
She doesn't seem to take anyones feelings into consideration and often ends up making feel like crap

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  • Gossamer Guile
    December 13, 2007

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    Very well written. I believe everyone can identify with this. Great message. Thank you for entering.


  • Heavens Child
    August 30, 2007

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    This is very well written. I think we could all benefit from spending a day in someone else's shoes.
    One small error - blooms should just be bloom because you've used the plural form of rose. Thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • Darkened Seraph
    July 16, 2007

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    wow this is really powerful, i mean it. the image you have created is amazing, i really liked all of it. there feels like theres a lot of agression hiden in the meaning of this poem which im not sure if its what you were after but it actually helps to create a really effective feel of the poem. the poem has again a really good flow and this helps to create the image of what you were probably trying to create it shows a lot of fustration within this poem which helps the reader understandhow you feel, overall this is a really impressive write. remember i am always here to listen if you ever need it


  • Faithless Angel
    July 5, 2007

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    a thoughtful write, and indeed there will always be people like that.
    there will always be people better off than us, but also those who are worse off than us, and i know sometimes it feels impossibe but think about it.
    great write
    luv xx