Paper Dolly's
Joining Hands
Sharing The Pain
You Bestowed Upon Me.
And I Loved You;
Dreaming Of That Fairytale Ending;
When We'd Kiss
In A Shower Of Bullets.
I'd Be Your Ballerina [Baby]
And Tip Toe Around Those Lovely Lies.
The Sparks Fly
From The Frayed Edges.
Her Splintered Heart
Remains The Missing Piece
Reaching Out;
A Needy Child;
You Abused The Right To Touch Me;
[You Lost The Right To Love Me]
I Hope
That Ring You Gave To Her
Loose’s Its Shine;
And I Hope;
You Both Jump,
Gractiously From A Ten Storey.
Author notes
I believed this poem did have potential before i went back to it and butchured it!
Deary me! Sorry!
This was bitter twisted dirty pretty, or my intrepretation.
Thank you!
Sophie <3
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A contest entry
- Show me your best Dirty Pretty by Nobody Royale.
500 points, ended July 6, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thats funny, "butchured" was the last adjective that popped in my mind
I was thinking more like, stunning, outstanding
I REALLY loved this
Tasty dirty-pretty!!
japan
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The imagery is wonderful here!
It is one of your better pieces I think. I love it, hun.
The last stanza reminds me of
Senses Fail,
"You're cute when you scream."
Bahaha.
Nice job <3 -
sooo beatiful babyface.
xx
ILY
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beautiful darling, absolutely breath taking. i love it babe. =]
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this is good....waaayy longer than 10 lines...I liked this line 'I'd Be Your Ballerina [Baby]
And Tip Toe Around Those Lovely Lies.'
I do feel the bitterness in it..thank you for your entry and good luck
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Honey you never cease to amaze.
And don't be absurd, you didn't butcher it at all.
I absolutely loved the last two lines.
You're astounding babe
LY
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OhMyGosh!!
I love thisss.
It's beautiful :
I'd Be Your Ballerina [Baby]
And Tip Toe Around Those Lovely Lies.
Such immense imagery.
Just.. blewww me away. Gorgeous x
KetFace - Magic xX -
aww this is beautiful♥
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