I’ve always wanted to scribble all over your pearly whites
And watch you splutter and stutter on permanent ink.
Whispering those intoxicating words into my ear
Doesn’t work for me, its sultry & so inviting
&& I hate public displays of affection.
&& I know you eat permanent pens when you’re board
Then you cough and hiccup delectable bubbles for.. hours
And inside them is always perfect little stories of just us two
You sit and stare, not daring to blink in case you miss a second
Utterly adorable – you really think that we will be together forever
Author notes
Hmm.. Short poems
I hope you like x :]
^.^
A contest entry
- Show me your best Dirty Pretty by Nobody Royale.
500 points, ended July 6, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
=]
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This is lovely, just one spelling error, in the first line of the second stanza you wrote "board" whereas it should be "bored"
As board is a table or card board, haha :] -
aw i love this
it makes me think of my boyfriend
he sux haha
this is very good doll♥ -
"&& I hate public displays of affection."
Bahaha. That reminds me of my Middle School Assistant Principle (Who now works at a nearby highschool.)
And the announcements would ring like crazy with "NO PDA!!!" And all the little preppy girls hugging and kissing cheeks would be shouted at and all the boyfriends and girlfriends hanging on eachother would get in trouble...
And everyone would make fun of the "No PDA rule"
Ahaha. Good times.
Anyways. This piece was wonderful. The first stanza was breath taking.
It was written lovely, I love your work.
Great job <3 -
oh so awesome doll!
I’ve always wanted to scribble all over your pearly whites
And watch you splutter and stutter on permanent ink.
Whispering those intoxicating words into my ear
Doesn’t work for me, its sultry & so inviting
&& I hate public displays of affection
the best part =]
xx
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I really liked this...took me a minute to get it but good job...this is my favorite line of the piece
'&& I know you eat permanent pens when you’re board
Then you cough and hiccup delectable bubbles for.. hours
And inside them is always perfect little stories of just us two'...well done...thank you for your entry and good luck
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