Dare to kiss that would embrace a love’s dream?
The soft light of your kiss
It was like the sound of two table glass being hit
or a metal spoon being knocked on the glass plate
the sound of love being spun to add
embodiments on my heart
Slow like the pace of sewing a dress is love for me
but yet your love dashed right in
I mean it fell in as with just a push, a small push
my love fell within you and yours within mine
except before it did you shifted to the right
as you collected both my love and my heart
I felt your face
so soft was it, my palm felt soft and cleanse
and your lips tasted like a sweet gel
like oil stained into one’s part hair, unremoved
forever to hold that gentle kiss with you
was like sleeping within sunrays, in its own bed
So calm and sensual was your spirit
softer then dawn’s whispers, or that of a bird
can never hear her beautiful wings flapping across the atmosphere
...dying across fields so lovely, and how do you die in beauty
heaven loss of words she simply couldn’t say
that she wanted to have you
yet I guess the angels wanted you,
so beautiful you left my way
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in their embrace
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To me I read this like Shakespeare, because it to me had a shakespearian feel to it. The choice of words flowed that way and made me think of the great love tragedies. Nice word choices.
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So many sensations running rampant through a pageant of imagery and kisses come true! Beautiful & sweet-even with a couple of lines that didn't flow quite so smooth.
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Dare to kiss what would embrace a love's dream. That would be my first line. Instead of that, I would put what. Next, like it was the soft light of your kiss. I feel like something is missing there where you say " was the soft light of your kiss".
It has maturing feel with a tingling sensation of love. I like it, it is very beautiful and your words cascade so gentle. You are pretty talented. Keep up the great work and be blessed
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The visuals that floated through my mind while reading this, were outstanding. It just took me beautiful places. I just loved the feel of this, it truly touches the reader.
Soulful Woman
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This is a very nice write...so filled with imagery and love. I wondered if the ended meant that this love had traveled on in death? For the angels wanted her. An amazing write. Thanks for sharing!
Blessed Be...
Azlyn
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Oh. This is a very nice poem that you have here. I liked the sweet sentiment of the words and how you seemed so caught up in expressing yourself. I thought it sounds like you were having a wonderful time being in love with this person and makes me want to experience it too!
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Hmm. The imagery here used was powerful, yet strange. The mattress reference kind of threw me off, but I like it...because it's so different. It's a very nice write, and I think you did a very nice, experimental job with this. Very nice poem!
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