Hear the wind blow over,
Screaming like a crazy beast.
Wanting to calm like a child.
A contest entry
- Short Ain't All Bad; Right? by 2lullabyhaven.
475 points, ended April 28, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seasonal " Haiku's" by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended October 16, 2008, 44 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A realy well written piece. I could almost feel those strong March winds howling like a wild beast the roar of a Lion a realy good Haiku.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest. You might want to take a closer look at your syllable count. I count 6-7-6.
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Thank you, for this lovely Haiku
good luck.
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Your image definitely did it for me... made me want to actually read this slower, and I paused for a second to see it in my head and really feel what you meant by your words.
Thank you very much for your entry
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I like the literal image and emotion of this piece. It has a strong visual aspect to it, but I feel it doesn't move on, like there needs to be more there. Hmm, I'll read this one over again later.
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This image is quite captivating. I can see how it pulled forth such lovely words to capture its essence. Nice job on this.
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Short but powerful, very well written, such imagery, within so few words...
Very well done, thanks for entering and best of luck
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8.5-9 (judging on scale of 1-10)
beautifully concise. the imagery is amazing, and extremely well-expressed in this short piece. there is however a sort of awkwardness in the last line in the phrase "wanting to calm", something there doesn't flow as well as it could. overall though, nice work. -
A good poem.
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Thought provoking
Well crafted, short poignant piece. The photo matches perfectly, did you write the poem about the photo? Bravo.
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