Hear the cow?
What does the cow say?
Moo.
Hear the chicken?
What's the chicken say?
Cluck.
Hear the pig?
What does the pig say?
Oink.
Hear the rooster?
What does the rooster say?
Cockle-doodle-doo.
Hear my heart?
What does my heart say?
Slowly trimming, off the hedge,
Paying laments, kiss the dead
Leave your sorrows here behind
Before they stretch, consume your mind
Grope and cleanse
Grab and scream
Life is not a pretty dream
Where one can think and ice cream appears
This life makes you work for years
To get that, your secret desire
Then in the flash of an eye
It's gone.
Glancing feebly, fleetly it leaves
So scream for a minute, if you please
But nothing hears you, no they don't
They are busy with their own lack of hope
Don't count on anyone, this is my advice
Don't count on anyone, not once, not twice
Don't count on anyone, they will fail
Don't count on anyone, or they will rail
Against your hopeless, lifeless corpse
While you weep in bitter remorse
Pain unseaming, stitches falling
From the hidden bodybag beneath
The floorboards.
Your secrets come to life.
Hear the dog?
What does the dog say?
Bark.
Hear the cat?
What sound does the cat make?
Meow.
Hear the bird?
How does the bird go?
Chirp.
Hear my heart?
What does my heart do?
Author notes
I like this one. Lots. Be honest, though... I hate if people lie to me. So please be honest, as always, and thanks for reading!!!
OPTION 21. LOVE IS A BATTLEFIELD.
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lol, this is amusing and yet deep at the same time. It reads very easily and is so true. I think it's the best one from you so far. When I first saw the title I was reminded of my friend who loves cows and I wasn't quite sure what to expect. It was certainly surprising and in a pleasing way. You effectively state the cold, hard truth of life while rhyming and keeping my attention. Beautiful work.
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lol!!!!! AT FIRST I THOUGHT I WAS READING A CHILDRENS BOOK!
very cleverly worded....
with childrens nursery rhymes sandwhiching in your poem ...
well done...............
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WISHING YOU MUCH LOVE----
AND GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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"This life makes you work for years
To get that, your secret desire
Then in the flash of an eye
It's gone.
Glancing feebly, fleetly it leaves
So scream for a minute, if you please
But nothing hears you, no they don't
They are busy with their own lack of hope
Don't count on anyone, this is my advice
Don't count on anyone, not once, not twice
Don't count on anyone, they will fail
Don't count on anyone, or they will rail
Against your hopeless, lifeless corpse
While you weep in bitter remorse
Pain unseaming, stitches falling
From the hidden bodybag beneath
The floorboards.
Your secrets come to life."
I LOVE those lines!!!! This poem is wonderful!
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Litle lengthy and a few to many questions. I like the topic studied and the intriguing wording. Nicely penned.
Much luck
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This was good, however at times it felt lost, and the rhythm was sometimes broken. I did like it though, despite the minor details. Thank you very much for a great entry!
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i really like it.
i thought it was going to be animals but you bring into it feeling and it flows really well good luck
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I like it a lot. I love how you start off with the animal sounds and end with the animal sounds.
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dang...that is really really good...i love it
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