Depletion being a milder word
Yet depicts my state of mind
When it comes to you
For it describes perfectly
On a minuscule scale
The fantastic awful rush
And lack of rush
Imparted to me
squeezed from your absence.
In a list
A contest entry
- What is your emptiness? by tara wilson.
900 points, ended July 13, 2007, 22 entries
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I feel this one lacks on imagery too, telling a bit more than giving the reader something to view in their mind through metaphor, ect...I feel your emotions and emptiness though...but seeing is believing...if that makes sense?lol....thank you for this entry
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Believe it or not it's my shortcoming, I am not good on that I am however in the process of trying to learn so please wish me luck in that area, thanks so much lol
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a great opening and excellent ending and everything in between was cool too...great piece
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Thanks Iggy, you are so kind.lol
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Powerful words here. I especially like the opening two lines. This is a fine write, I also liked the way it portrays the duality of feelings... and how we measure them. Good luck in the contest.
Martin
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Wow, thanks for this lovely comment on my poem. Fantastic. lol
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