flowers mesmerized
by their glow aloft the trees
do have vertigo
Author notes
so, you foreget your roots
A contest entry
- Under Four Lines and Funny - A couple of Options. Prewrites by Anastasiya.
477 points, ended July 23, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a very interesting piece. I had to read it a couple of times to understand it. Maybe that's what makes it special. thanks for entereing my contest again
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I don't really get it, but the word choice is amazing! lol Perhaps you can enlighten me.
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Dear Star Wars,
In my mind, you can read it two ways. One, the way you see the splendour of a tree with flaming flowers swaying in the wind, suggesting vertigo, a malady that brings giddiness with height. The other, you have grown so far above the roots that feed you that you dislike looking down because you feel giddy from such height. The idea took hold of me while talking to a top politician here who lamented the ideological degradation of the communist movement here. I suggested that it might be because the leaders, when they acquire power, tend to forget the roots from where they had come up. The leader, a quick-witted chap, responded: "Gosh, you will feel giddy looking down from such heights."
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This was a charming piece! I am learning about Haiku's and can tell you now...this is a great piece and my pleasure to read
~Tia
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Nice, concise, I might almost say beautiful.
Good Stuff!!
Jim
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Thank you, Jim. Of late I have been trying my hand at haiku, but am ashamed of the results. Just compare what we produce in AP with this one by 17th century Japanese poet Ringai:
In these dark waters
Drawn up from my frozen well...
Glittering of spring
Regards,
Venu.
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