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~Ravenous Charms~

~

Captivate
the quintessence
of my heart
as
I look deep into
your piercing eyes.

Enchanting my consciousness
By the exploit
Of
your animal magnetism.
Obsessively
needing
a
touch to your
lips and
skin

To your ravenous charms
I stride towards
a pang
of
impatient-ness

Characteristic
habits initiate
a
speeding ticket
for your plan

Dynamic stimulation
with a sip
of
wine
relinquishing our
permissiveness.

As for the morning
cooled
my heart more then
a winter

dominant love
frightened my
freedom

~


Author notes

Teddibly Abnormal -Collaborated with- Malicai: http://allpoetry.com/Malicai such fun!

prompt: "It was as though the devil himself wept tears of pure sound." -Phantom by Susan Kay

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Comments


  • Florida Sunshine
    July 15, 2007

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    T.A. ~ I am grateful I had the opportunity to get to know you! I had fun messaging back and forth as we put the piece together little by little... You are a terrific person and I hope we can be friends for a long time. Thanks for the collab! It was my first, I am very happy it was with you. Truly you've help create something very special, like you... I love it!


    • Teddibly Abnormal
      July 15, 2007
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      xox

      i'm glad we got to collaborate together. it was my first too~ haha. i'm just about as proud of this piece as is lawfully in the "not vain" zone

      i have a AP family thing going on. wanna join?


  • Andy Stephenson
    July 5, 2007

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    Temptation?

    Is the devil tempting the protagonist in this poem? They give into temptation? I am not sure that I understand this one. Much success in the contest.

    Andy


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    July 4, 2007

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    Oh woowwwwww...The both of you did a great poem here. I for sure could not tell wich part came frome where.
    All the parts captured me from the beginning till the end....
    But my favorite part for sure was this:

    Enchanting my consciousness
    By the exploit
    Of
    your animal magnetism.
    Obsessively
    needing
    a
    touch to your
    lips and
    skin

    So sorry I can only give you clappies once
    You should deserve more, and the Gold too
    XXJeannette