Love is a Drug- a Fanciful Critique

"Love Is a Drug"

the drug in me

love is a drug,

it is a spell,

it is a poisen,

my love for you is my drug,

seeing you is my spell,

and you are my pure poisen,

i cannot excape you,

and i will never want too,

because you are the drug,

that runs completly through me

by 'newpoet'



Hello, newpoet, allow me critique your poem:



(reading)



OK, ready:



“love is a drug”

WOW! I am taken aback! This first line is dynamite! Sheer genius! What an original concept! “Love is a drug”- who would EVER have thought of that! and the words just flow like honey- such a careful choice of syllables- my, how they work together, tantalizing the poetic appetite of any reader. MORE! MORE! MORE!


“it is a spell”

HOLY SHIT! another brilliant comparison, and equally brilliant handling of the English language! I just LOVE how you employed it to its fullest effect! Sheer magic!


“it is a poisen”

DAMN if you aren’t on a ROLL! Just SUPER-IFIC! Why, you’ve got that superb use of ‘it’ in there again, and another stellar metaphor of utmost originality… and the way you misspelled poison brings out its toxicity… THREE STARS so far!


“my love for you is my drug”

OH, I can’t hold back the tears- you are dripping with emotion now… excuse me, let me blow my nose, I am blubbering…


“seeing you is my spell”

Ah, now the intellectual- illustrating the drug/spell/poisen theme with more depth and subtle sensitivity… just a BRAVO here! First you tease us with the introduction of these three aspects of love, then you take us on a deep and terrifying plunge into the darkest deep recesses of the deep and dark plungefully terrifying darkness of the human heart and psyche…


“and you are my pure poisen”

A perfect wrap up to the trio of deep illustrations that you’ve presented in what is the middle portion of this fabulously organized and artufully arranged conception of poetic meanderings through such uncharted waters…


“i cannot excape you”

NOW you hit the reader with that masterful shift in thought- thrusting forward into the intellectual and emotional realms that have never hitherto been explored by anyone anywhere at anytime in all of recorded history and beyond… I await the next line with baited breath… and the spelling play on escape signifies the true essence of escape…!


“and I will never want to”

BINGO! I am not disappointed! I am hit with a sledgehammer! Your profundity of thought and precipice of emotions have been all laid bare in this instant classic of a quote… dazzling, just dazzling…


“because you are the drug”

Oh, I pity the guy you are writing this to- he will be butter in your hands, your astounding use of phonetic interplay- note how the ‘z’ sound of ‘because’ dances with the ‘g’ of drug… pure erotica…


“that runs completely through me”

and the GRAND FINALE! I am seeing fireworks through my misty eyes! Oh, my heart’s afire! Joy and ecstasy are mine at last! A -final line- to beat all final lines! A perfect wrap-up to the crystalized thoughts and emotions portrayed in this ground-breaking piece! Note how the word ‘completely’ leaves no doubt as to your inescapable destiny with this lucky beau… ten stars! You have INSPIRED me! I must now write an ode to your beautiful and breathtaking composition here…



“Love is a Drug”- such a bountiful gift
you have given us here in humanity’s den
“It is a Spell”- such a cadence of truth
spoken with intellect, wit and experience
“It is a Poisen”- now what more is there
to say on a matter that confounds us all?
“My Love for You is My Drug”- such essence
given totally to the one that is hopelessly desired
“Seeing you is My Spell”- you give us more,
as if the first line simply wasn’t enough
“and You are My Pure Poisen”- pure indeed,
and with that one word he will purely be yours
“I Cannot Excape You”- so tragically told-
a confessional of one smitten completely
“and I Will Never Want To”- the irony-
caught in a trap, but not wishing to flee…
“Because You are the Drug”- so aptly phrased,
and carries us further through this tri-ringing love bell…
“That Runs Complete Through Me”- and here, in the end,
you give yourself totally to your destiny's love…

Oh, such a journey through affection
I am drenched in sweat
panting and heaving from this seminal event.
Thanks for sharing such an exhausting foray
into the inscrutable dominion of our unfathomable desires-
the longing, the clinging, the clutching, the tumbling,
the sweetness, the bitterness, the pain and elation
that only comes with a voyage through love…
or for me, eating a peanut M&M.