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Unusual Love

Born in the comforting arms
Of the white heavens above
Drawn to you because of
My curiosity, the temptation.
You exuded the scent of danger
Your movements held evidence of past dark deeds
Piercing me with fear and excitement.
When we both dwelled on the mortal's earth
I would dilligently watch you, fascinated
In all of your
Glorious power, your menacing strength
Until that fated day when our paths crossed.
My whole being froze in your stare.
Repressing the instinct to emit a horrified scream
Holding my wings close to resist the urge to fly away.
Then I realized your burning eyes
Told the tale of a hollow, melancholy existence.
Stepping closer, I reached a shaking hand
Towards your tormented and tattooed face
As your icy, harsh breath crept
Along my bare skin.

Forged in the biting flames of Hell
Attracted to you because of
My desperate, fatally secret hope for salvation.
I once thrived from guiltless sins and merciless death
Then I witnessed your pure radiance, your golden brilliance
And a graceful beauty I have never known.
Following your trail, smelling of innocence
I would search for your warm aura
Until that fated day when our paths crossed.
Unsuprised at the raw terror
Expressed upon your fair face.
I silently begged you to not abandon me
Suddenly your demeanor transformed.
I felt you study my terrible, grotesque wings
When you then rested your stunning eyes onto mine.
Slowly, slowly you walked forward to me
Placing your soothing hand on my face.

"Why do you not fear me?" he asked
She gently smiled and replied
"Because now I see nothing to fear."
And softly laid a simple kiss upon his cheek.

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  • scream.n2.nite
    March 26, 2008

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    This piece was great!! Very worthy of my contest... it made me think of a pic I'd seen picturing a lovely angel holding a collapsed form of a mechanic angel, and whereareas he was unfeeling she was completely touch... where his wings were created from metal and rust, hers were natural white feathers... anyways this write reminded me of that, and I loved the two different perspectives you used... you, me, he/she... good stuff!! I was a little offcentered by the ending, for I think it could have been stronger. Thanks for the poem!!

    - - riah - -


  • XInsanity-FairX
    October 29, 2007

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    this was a great poem,truly amazing]the imagery and emotion just flowed out
    i had mental images of everything with every word i read
    and the ending was fantastic, i just loved it, it was a soft ending, i like that.
    it's like the ending to a movie.a very weird movie, but a movie...

    and i'm not 100 percent sure
    but i think you used an angel(hence the wings)..and a vampire?...
    well it doesn't really matter tbh cos the point i'm making is you used good and evil, 2 natural enemies melted by a fascination towards the other.
    it's common knowlage that most good girls are attracted to bad boys, but this takes to a new extreme lol..

    i love the idea, theme, imagery, and the emotion

    thanks for entering and good luck
    xxxx
    XD




  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine

  • Acidanthra
    September 23, 2007

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    This is a great poem! There were so many emotions involved, but all at the right moments. It flowed very well and I loved the wording throughout the entire write. You did an amazing job with this poem. I couldn't see the picture, but oh well, I didn't need one after reading it. You gave me an image. Awesome job!


  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    September 19, 2007

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    im trying to remember another time in my life when i read a poem that sent shivers down my spine, but i cant. this poem is extraordinary, incredibly well written, and i enjoyed every second of reading it.


  • opaqueangel
    September 13, 2007
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    Wow this is amazing!!!!! I really loved this peice! Excelent write and good luck in the contest!!!


  • Aurielle
    August 22, 2007

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    WOw i would love to know who wrote this. You write really good though i don't like the metaphors but your descriptions and the passion is so deep to me... nice


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 18, 2007

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    Following your trail, smelling of innocence
    I would search for your warm aura
    Until that fated day when our paths crossed.
    Unsuprised at the raw terror
    Expressed upon your fair face.

    and the hunt is on


  • Wrozes Thorne
    August 16, 2007

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    Wow, I really like this one! This is an excellent write, it has an voice to it that I can hear when I read it. Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Just waiting
    August 13, 2007

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    nice piece! i hate yellow font on a black background makes it hard for me to read but that is not what i am looking for when i judge so back to your poem. you did a great job with this piece i liked it very much. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.

  • unraveled
    August 5, 2007

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    the last four lines are the strongest part of the whole poem, they pull the entire piece together. this piece can be taken as religious or not, but as a metaphor for something else. i love the line "i felt you study my terrible, grotesque wings"... what a wonderful image. i love the internal struggle throughout. good job on this, thanks for the entry.

    cassidy


  • Debbie Hansman
    July 24, 2007

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    "Unusual Love"....I would have to say that it sure is after reading this. A very gripping write.

    Good Job!

    Thank you for entering and Good Luck!

    debbie


  • Asfand
    July 11, 2007
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    wow.....this was so beautiful! i really liked the imagery and well- it was awesome!!

  • lovergirl89
    July 5, 2007
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    wow...i love!!!


  • reckless abandon
    July 4, 2007

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    This was amazing! I loved the vocabulary and thought put into this. You're definately a finalist, thanks for entering!

    -KP]


  • CassidyEngle
    July 4, 2007
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    This is the best poem yet!

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