silly dragonfly...
thinking, she could do it again
with such a simple mind
too scared to stay anywhere
very long
too beaten down to
keep getting up
what was her problem?
silly dragonfly...
that truck smashed her
like a hand grenade
splattering parts everywhere
but at least, she
would not be an
easy mess to
clean up
he would have to work
hard
to remove all
the bits
that remained of her
A contest entry
- oh, to just disappear... by CarCrashHumor.
1500 points, ended August 15, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I must say this is quite original , [however just yesterday I was discussing with someone how beautiful I think dragonflys are] Poor thing
Best wishes in this contest,
reenie
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Thanks
I love dragonflies!!! This was just because I was washing my car and poor things were all over the front. It's terrible. Thanks for reading and commenting! Betsy
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This is a great write DF! I loved every word and image! Expertly written!
Love,
Azlyn
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I love the bit about splattering like a hand grenade.
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came up with the idea while playing paintball over the week-end ---- gross messy destruction !! Happy 4th!!
betsy
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Lol, that's so cool. I wish my mom played paintball.
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It's awesome!!!!! I went one time and was totally hooked! I am so addicted now. I am totally bruised all over all the time though. I believe most people think I'm insane---which I don't deny, but I love getting out there in the fox holes and crawling around waiting for the perfect chance to peg some unsuspecting enemy perfectly in the face! LOL I'm the one who has to beg my kids to go with me... but I've met some people out there on teams and they've been asking me to join - so maybe that's what I'll end up having to do. Have you ever asked your mom to try it?
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I did, but all I got was a nasty glance and she walked away. She's weird like that.
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her loss!!!
I would LOVE TO GO!!! You should check out my myspace --- it's the last paintball tournament i went to - grunge vs. rock they are just a blast. i love the tournaments now because it's all day non stop!
when? where? and do you cry like a baby when you get hit? lol
I prefer the rambo thing except once in awhile I'm tired and I crawl up on unsuspecting peeps
too bad you don't like in NC i'd add you into our team right now -- we sure could use another player! we only have 7 & we would love 8, but the ones we ask always back out with some lame excuse...
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Thanks for wanting to ask me though! I would join, but 8-12 hours is too long to drive for paintball
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lol --- yeah, that's a hike!!! ok, i'll just have to write about the next tournament for ya --- or check out my myspace...---
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nice victorious ending!
"but at least, she
would not be an
easy mess to
clean up
he would have to work
hard
to remove all
the bits
that remained of her"
and I love the metaphor.
great write -
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thanks! I'm glad you appreciated that I liked the idea of someone having to do the clean up and think about what happened. Thanks for the great contest idea !!! Betsy
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