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Oh The Ladies

Oh the ladies
Oh the ladies
how I sent them all to Hades
just to gaze upon the velvet of their skin
Oh the brilliant blood was bled
from the holes put in her head
all to wash that velvet red
to cleanse their sin

Oh the stories I could tell
of the wicked ones that fell
to the darkest depths of hell
within my hands
Oh the sweet tears that were shed
and the prostitutes made dead
and the hunger that was fed
by my demands.

They say beauty rests inside
so I opened her up wide
but I knew the bastards lied
to everyone.
Oh and how her mother cried
to hear that her daughter died
it just added to my pride
to know I’d won

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option number six

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  • thenorthernstar
    August 9, 2008
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    good poem thanks for entering


  • Poetic Obscenity
    August 3, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL! Simply fantastic. I love it! =]


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    August 27, 2007

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    Now, This is AWESOME! I love this piece a lot.. its fantastically well done! Thank you so much for entering, goodluck!


  • Sarah957
    August 16, 2007

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    I liked this part-

    They say beauty rests inside
    so I opened her up wide
    but I knew the bastards lied

    Its horrible but taking it litteraly makes me laugh.


  • Astrid-Star
    August 15, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this one.

    Because the whole thing made me smile. A little weird I know. But it kinda of takes on that "cocky" and proud tone, which I completely loved.

    One thing.

    Holes in their head??? I'm confused as to what you are referring too.

    Other than that, this was an amazing write.

    Good luck in the contest.

    Darkest Wishes
    laUrel-danYelle


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    August 3, 2007

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    The only thing is, did Jack put holes in their heads? Great poetry, excellent. The further I read the more I was ... moving my head into the screen and bumping it ... lol.
    Excellent work

    Bandaid.


  • Ravenblood
    August 3, 2007

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    Shite, like jo i was thinking about Jack the Ripper,when you said .. yay,. go me. lol. anywho - i really like this poem, its well written and has a wonderful new slant to the killings.
    good write and good luck in the contest.

    Claire-Anne


  • Jiyo
    August 1, 2007

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    I kept thinking of Jack the ripper, and then I found out that this was about Jack the ripper, a different format that works VERY well, nice job


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 11, 2007
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    ok... then...haha...yeah


  • Whitemaiden
    July 3, 2007
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    Good flow! Your poem is etched in my mind and your work shall be scored accordingly.

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