Tossed into a drowning pool of light
I値l loose my faith, or else I値l lose my sight
and if the darkness is imposed on me
I値l spend the summer soaked in memory
But if my faith is what I知 bound to lose
it still won稚 be the worst fate I could choose
for faith is something easily defaced
while sight just simply cannot be replaced
And if He needs a further reprimand
I値l gladly put both back into God痴 hand
but if He means some message to convey
I pray he won稚 take either one away
Whichever way, when this ordeal is done
it will have proved I don稚 need either one
A contest entry
- That time again... sonnets! by Cwm.
400 points, ended July 6, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sonnets, sonnets, and more sonnets by RatherImaginative.
1925 points, ended September 8, 2007, 40 entries
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Comments
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Line 1 is short a syllable, and I've a question about line 2: is "loose" intentional, or a mistype? Because it could work either way. Good rhythm otherwise.
Such a conflict felt within these lines! The very nature of faith is trusting in what we cannot see, and at the same time, we cannot always trust what our eyes appear to tell us. Your poem is very thought-provoking. Thanks so much for entering my contest! -
It's hard for me to relate to this, I'm not religious, but it's a well written poem. (or maybe I'm just tired)
Great job and thanks for entering!
Amber
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